Doll clothes arrive in a box
granddaughter opens to see
the surprise as eager fingers
tear the paper and plastic
off that are attached to
each garment – hippey
hippey hip the old clothes
come off Jess the American
Girl doll as she becomes a
fairly tale princess then a
bathing beauty followed by
a high school graduate – she’s
all dressed up with black
patent leather shoes and
white tights-the doll is
transformed from one style
to the next by antsy hands
who can’t wait to see which
shoes go with which outfit and
if in fact the graduation outfit
could double as a rain coat and hat
ah to be young again when dolls
with taffeta gowns and cotton
shirts could change a doll’s mood
from alluring to down to earth.
Author notes
I wanted to try to capture my granddaughter and her siblings enjoying together the opening of a box of new doll clothes for her American Girl doll. I used her favorite color purple.
Should I add more punctuations?
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you did quite well and it seems i might be seeing what not is there but it feels a deeper meaning locked away in thsi peice the longing for a innocecne once lost beautiful peice never the less
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Very impressive poem that is full of great images and brings back memories. This poem if full of great lines and one of my favorites is the last--"from alluring to down to earth. Great poem!
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Very Enjoyable
I like it! You don't need puncuation, but if you wanted to add it, you could. I just enjoyed the flow and the excitement of a new doll!
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antsy hands...
The wonder of children playing... what is better to watch? You have snatched up a special moment in life and allowed us to peek into your cupped hands at the treasure you hold!
Excellent work Ruth!
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I would add a bit more puncuations to the piece, it will allow the flow of the poem a smooth pursuit
This is a lovely piece, I too have a grandchild and soon...I will be loading her up dolls, I can't wait!!!!! Just lovely, ~Tia
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