The crik looks nice today,
darlking and heavy of girldhood passions.
The world seems big
why not hide?
Your mind a seductive weapon,
taking itself by thought.
An iroic reality of imaturity,
thinking and not knowing.
You loner child
let me save you from this oddity.
All at once you'll grow older,
and your mind crease deeper.
See in your life
you've built memories
selfishly on you.
I'm asking please
do not be afraid.
Take more hands
and be carried away.
Use your mind to open more passions,
you have friends to be shared,
and loves to happen.
little melissa,
don't be a loner,
open your heart to people.
Author notes
Well this is a poem to myself, i decided not to do that letter. But idk how great it seems to you but this is how i see myself talking to my younger self. This is the wisdom i would have given to my 10 year old self. (new version i just recently edited)
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
600 points, ended August 19, 2007, 17 entries
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You definitely get an A+ for the artistic quality but, I had to ask myself how realistic it would be for one to use words and expressions such as 'gilded passions''judgment censure on yourself''your mind creases deeper'
I have a 14 year old nephew that would look at me like I had lost my mind! Heck, I would look at me the same way too. I had a good vocabulary then but, not so good I would have really absorbed that chat, no matter how eloquently it's worded. In the end you toned it way down, was much more realistic to me there. I am not saying this is bad, not one bit..loved how you worded it...and it's wonderful and deeply touching and I can feel the sincerity. 
Thank you for entering and best of luck to you.
Bella
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thansk very much! This topic was very real for me! lol i didn't really take tha into consiteration....of course if i would have said that to my youger self i would have just asked lol or something....lol psh i would have gotten a dictionary . but thank you very much!
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You are most welcome sweetie. Like I said, it didn't count against you in anyway. It actually made me chuckle. Too cute!
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Sweetheart hugs to you ,you should be proud of yourself,keep your head held up high,and always be you,Love,Hazel
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wow. like omg wow. i think i am truly the one who can relate to you the closest on this one. Can you even fathom how much we've changed since then? This is getting bookmarked!!! i love it. you are truly maturing as a writer and i love it. love it love it love it. <<<333
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Ik! it's like i was thinkin what in the world would i say?!? and lol dumb me i had one friend in the world and i was a loner it was perfect lol
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This is meaningful
I can totally relate to this poem. This I would say to my younger self also.Very well written.
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Very good... it was cute, and for being the first thing you've wrote since that night hanging out wit rika and me, well id say Job Well Done My dear.. Very nice. I wish i could go back and think of what i would say to my younger self.. jeez that might be scary. lol hmm i may have to do that sometime lol great write! keep it up!
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