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is there some calculus
to explain this
addiction
by subtraction

a new math
that produces

more
appealing results


i am willing to learn

to speak with tongues
of men or angels

open myself wide

as the spirit
fills me
like an alter boy
after vespers

beyond what is known

 

where reason fails

i will listen to the wind
and call it a voice

close my eyes hard
until the dark
turns to white

accept a truth that sheds

no flattering light and

marvel still

at the rate of entropy
of a small life now smaller

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Bams
    March 17

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    timid to advancement

    this confronts the souring amid the treasured

    that ending is smashingly in need of something said, to reread to not wrongly comfort. there's construction for precise practice as infinity to be found, but we're restricted. yet there's no ignoring unbound has underlying to underline which can be notably denounced as around Noah's era, longevity was quite differently told to have to be 120 years. but then remarkably, nothing grandiose could be on average other than Psalm 90 with life expectancy made 75-80, with inveterate taming "Show [us] just how to count our days in such a way
    That we may bring a heart of wisdom in." and generalized knowledge can't have the abiding caring factor without terms honing in on how the creator causes to become.

    exquisitely not a quirky thing all you could.

    So, may there be no nuisance in not being distracted by null sets but lining up with the origin and the unwithered grid; Ecclesiastes 3:11 shows imprinted on every heart is to have sought out for unreachable beauty as a good thing, endless wonder. Not getting sidetracked comes back to Psalm 83:18. that name looked to can return the chromatics of common sense. there is relevance in many an etymology of biblical spokesmen such as Isaiah. And when writing went from Hebrew to Greek, one pronounced didn't reflect this similarity immediately. but onelook dictionary resourcefully reinforces 'L. Jesus, Gr. , from Heb. Yésha'; Yāh Jehovah + hsha' to help' and that indicates the fitting orientation of restoration he made crucial to be spread as hope on this planet with miracles at the fulfillment.

    interestingly, there is a scriptural formula for watching and rewatching this for heightening amazement not the other way around. not awfully depressing fast.

    I hope you don't find your chemise to need to cover what we become but would share the clothing of love, of no sham to want to tell each other always but it's confusion just from our itch. imagination can't correct things.

    what precious demographics there are yet needing answers,
    babies are my subject

  • account disabled
    December 5, 2007

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    there was a time when I thought birth-blind persons
    see black... then I thought they see white
    I'm starting to realize they see all light specter
    they just don't know to associate it with color
    maybe they don't need to...


  • Pelican
    November 20, 2007

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    when i started the university, the squares began to fall in to place, physics, calculus, chemistry, ayn rand, and to an extent, poetry. this is why i'm intrigued by words. words are much like numbres, but one can not turn numbers into metaphores, and there is no darkness that can be turned into white in anything, other than words.

  • Namita silver member
    November 20, 2007
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    speechless...


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    love this
    just that simple/complex isn't it
    have to stand strong in who we are
    even if we aren't proud of all the choices
    we're proud of who we are when we come out of it.


  • ParadoxFry
    August 27, 2007

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    "i accept a truth that sheds
    no flattering light"

    This is a really beautiful turn of phrase. Within the piece though, it doesn't seem as hopeful as it might otherwise. Like the optimism it seems to contain is sucked from it, and rendered insignificant with the reduction of the small life by entropy.

    The existentialist in me can find the hope though. Perhaps the ugly truth accepted is the fact that the life is small and insignificant and by accepting making it ok, even though it's not what you'd hoped for.

    The contradiction between the religious symbolism (which doesn't really do it for me) and the hard sicence/factual/spiritual without being religious symbolism is quite promonent as well, and i would say effectively used.

    Admittedly anything over-religious typically results in my mind shutting down regardless if I want it to or not. I just don't feel connected to words or poetry that express that kind of sentiment, or use it as an image because I don't find it in myself, and don't relate.

    Awesome work though. it really did grab me.


  • Jaden silver member
    August 18, 2007
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    I like this.

  • K-Dense
    August 17, 2007

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    You need to google a poem calle d"Like Math" by a New Jersey slam poet named Chad Anderson.

    Gorgeous stuff Al.

    -C

  • Whoochi gold member
    August 16, 2007

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    Mr Morelli

    Mr Morelli + math =befuddled Whoochi; Mr Morelli + Math = Sheer Brilliant poetry....You continually amze me with your writing...enuff said to this equation....


  • monimac
    August 12, 2007

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    I love math, but I think I love poetry about math more? No, maybe just yours.

    I loved the play on "addiction" by subtraction. In fact, confession time... I read it as addition the first time lol.

    I appreciated the allusion to I Corinthians 13:1, it seemed very appropriate.

    "close my eyes hard
    until the dark
    turns to white"

    I just adored that stanza for its childish nature, which is a great complement nestled in the maturity of the entire piece.

    Thanks so much for sharing this Al. Excellent as always!


  • ellipsist
    August 10, 2007
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    love the blend of logic

    and spirituality... an absolutely beautiful and enigmatic mixture... very astute comparison


  • Grunts Girl
    August 10, 2007
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    to me math is like music and this thrummed hard on its own bass note...


  • boilerjim
    August 10, 2007

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    Well played

    Tremendous use of words! Intelligent but not cryptic, simple but having great depth. A really nice one Al.
    Thanks for the thoughts and words.


  • liltandrhyme silver member
    August 9, 2007

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    Really strong self-analytic poem, Al, the superb 'addiction by subtraction' defining the formula for what is essentially a spiritual, rather than a mathematical piece, the equally exquisite
    'rate of entropy

    of a small life
    now smaller'

    rounding it off with a resounding QED.

    Great work
    PJ

  • Zayra Yves gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    This is great Al. I love the originality under this poem and the way you have "substracted" the word base too. You always write such exceptionally philosophical poetry no matter what emotional subject or theme it is your pick.

  • grm
    August 8, 2007
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    entropy always has the last word.

    i liked this


  • NoIQ gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    dy/dx (loss-squared by the pain of recognition) = 2 x (the beauty of the resultant compostion).

    You know I am a major fan of the inclusion of mathematical and physics constructs within my own poetry, so I am sure that it comes as no surprise that I was delighed by this marvelous piece. I love the use of math as metaphor, and the inclusion of mathematical terminology as linguistic means to portray self-reflection. I haven't written anything in months, but the last poem I did played with some similar themes, including (ironically) entropy. This is a fine work Al, as much for the ease of the flow of the wording and metaphorical devices, as for the resultant beauty.

  • Yvette Champ
    August 8, 2007

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    Intense,thought provoking,well written and despite being longer than the poets usual compact pieces this is so tight it is air tight,the voice of reason reasoning with the unreasonable and willing to offer hail mary's full of grace if egg is worthy of being on face but their is tall in small and small in tall,but to atrophy,to waste away or feel as if negated as waste,that saps the spirit.Neat.

  • Arzab
    August 8, 2007

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    Beautiful write. I like the part of entropy. Made me think of black holes. I'm a big fan of cosmology and quantum physics. I'm not so much for the math, that's too complicated. But, as long as information is explained in layman terms, and in English, I feel I can understand most of it. Keep up the great writes.


  • Rowan gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    I hate math..lol..
    loved this, though.
    The metaphor of math in relation to life is excellent, and uniquely yours.
    Excellent penning, as usual.


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    I so loved the depth of this one, Al...this adding and subtracting of life, of dark and light, this opening and closing. This one speaks to me - I feel as if I myself could have, should have written this - but of course not as well as you did. Somehow this reminds me of my poem "and when I close my eyes"... simply wonderful poetry...one that lingers with me...

    ~ Nicolette


  • EdP
    August 8, 2007
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    perhaps a renal calculus would explain it
    looking for zero, always


  • Cat gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    as always your poetry slams home-

    it's wonderful poetry- if you close your eyes hard enough you make everything ok- that's a tough pill for the reader to read-

    this is really good al- it's nice to see a write from you.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    Math..... that word, even on its own, sends my mind off in some interesting directions... I love the little play on words through 'addiction' .. it sounds like 'addition' and that makes subtraction work ever so wonderfully.. of course there's far more to it than the twist, but it gives it an ironic feel.. at least for me..

    I'm struck by what seems ...somehow familiar to me, in this, in that "i am willing to learn" and the thought process after it... it seems like a promise to 'believe' if only 'faith' could be found.. and the connection to 'math' makes me think of logic, and how it tends to shred faith.. like tissue.., and of course I'm likely way off base, still.... where it took me is a place that's oddly comfortable....

    There are pieces in this, that feel as if they are the last ditch attempts ...to hang on.. to something entirely nameless, but known.. or maybe it's the wish of it that I see more strongly....again because of my own bias..

    and the end.. is excellent...




  • mantis180
    August 8, 2007

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    I think this may be your most beautiful piece yet... its astounding, and beautiful, and there are no words that are not too cliche to describe it...


  • NurseChilly gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    this speaks of one who's been there.. the life of addiction and the joys to be found following it...

    almost being bathed in truths and newness ... a baptism of honesty..

    i hear this Al.. maybe i'm going too deep, but this speaks to me, as if i know i've heard this from my clients and from what i say to them... there is always light and hope and if you add it all up.. the wonders of the world are all there.... when you look

    i really like this one Al.. speaks to me


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    "i am willing to learn

    to speak with tongues
    of men and angels

    open myself wide"

    I'd say you've already accomplished that, Al. An introspective piece with discernable layers. One that your readers can easily apply to their own experiences. Well done, my Friend. Wanda

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