Going back in time to little girl of ten,
Quite hard to remember way back then.
But yes I do know what I want to say,
Girl, in childhood linger longer and stay.
Just forget growing up fast as you can,
For these days never come back again.
And listen to Grandma for she is wise,
Shared her wisdom and her best advice.
Hold your siblings close to your heart,
For someday too soon we all will part.
Respect Mom & Dad for all your days,
They mean the world in so many ways.
Go to school as long as the money allows,
And take your sweet time making vows.
Life goes much better when it’s planned,
Start off right and it’s in your command.
Greet the world with your smile so bright,
Remember to say your prayers each night.
Seems all too soon you will be all grown,
And life can be so hard when on your own.
Author notes
Quatrains abab rhyme scheme
Prompt: What would you say to the child in you.
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
600 points, ended August 19, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
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Superb
Never a truer word written or spoken. A wonderful piece of writing. And it is true. Those days will never return again. Appreciate every moment. Sadly, hindsight is a wonderful thing to have. And the kids of today want to grow up so quickly. Anyway wonderful writing again.
All the best
Wayne
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Thank you
So glad you enjoyed, thank you so much for your kind comments and applause, very appreciated.
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oh wow. i luvd this piece. i guess ppl are in such a hurry to grow up that wen they get old they wish they werent hmm. its nice to be here agn aunt... readin ur beautiful lines. hope ur well. tek good care!
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Thank you!
There you are! I have missed you, yes I am well how about you? Where did you disappear too? So glad to hear from you. I have to update your ever-changing name again Thank you for the kind comments and applause, very appreciated.
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To add to my comment, where I talked about mistakes, was having a hard time expressing myself...what I was trying to get at is that I think that mistakes play a very important role in our lives. They are great learning tools as it is all well and good to heed advice but some lessons really get deep beneath the surface when learned firsthand from trial and error. Hope that explains where I was going a bit better.
Bella
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Fantastic penning. I love the wisdom in this. 4, 5, 6, 9, 11, 13, 14, 20...read like a guide.
I questioned lines 15 and 16 but only due to personal preference. Line 15: I love spontaneity and feel some true blessing stem from those moments in life where we go out on an unknown limb. Line 16: not exactly sure what you were saying there but, what it made me feel was, we all make mistakes....we just need to try to get the lesson that comes from them and apply them as not to repeat. By no means though do my personal preferences take away from the high regard I have for this outstanding poem. Wonderful work. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you.
Bella
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Thank you
I appreciate your kind comments, I was a child who wanted to be grown up from the moment I thought of it! I never enjoyed being a child unfortunately due to this, wish now I could do it over! Good luck with your contest!
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I share those feelings also. lol Was just in an all fired rush. As I said, I just love this, you've done such an incredible job and I thank you for it.
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: )
Forgot to rate.
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This was wondeful
This has a wonderul message, and I so would tell myself that if I was younger. At first it seems so cool to be grown up. You get responsibilities, and then so much is expected. I wish I could go back to my childhood self. Life indeed is hard when you're alone. Thank you for sharing this. -
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Thank you
Thank you so much for your kind comments and applause very much appreciated.
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So much knowledge and truth in this piece. It brought tears to my eyes by the end. This is one I will bookmark to come back and read again and again. It flows with the inner spirit of a wise sage.
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Thank you
I so appreciate your kind comments and applause. I am very honored you enjoyed it. Thank you
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