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Reincarnated Cut

Knowing I have seen your face
a impression left behind.

A mistake or maybe a fall from grace.
That lingering smell suductively familiar.

Being drawn in like a moth to a flame,
fear creeps in the shadows, while evil breathes down my neck.

Memories flash to different places in time.
My past lives are mixing with the present.

Realizing this is a warning left by myself once upon a time.
Stating clearly to escape unless I wish to repeat the same mistakes.

~**~

 

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  • Desire gold member
    June 12

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    Wow!!

    The last line grabs so hard I almost fell out of my chair
    ~~
    Powerful take on the prompt Hot Momma
    The images vivid~ took me right there

    Realizing this is a warning left by myself once upon a time.
    Stating clearly to escape unless I wish to repeat the same mistakes.
    Wowzers!!

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • JessieD
    March 8

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    This is a great poem

    You find yourself in the same situation, and even though the last one ended badly, the beggining left you wanting that feeling again, but then you get caught all over again if you don't cetch yourself.

  • Mirthryl
    February 14

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    Interesting idea, leaving warnings to ourselves in future lives. That twisty feeling in the pit of ones stomach is usually a good indicator to 'get out NOW', don't you think? Very nice "that lingering smell, seductively familiar." Familiarity has a sense of 'comfort zone', but you wisely point out that is not of necessity a positive thing! Congrats on the silver.


  • wordsworth
    November 17, 2007

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    Good

    A catchy poem. I think the second line should be, an impression left behind. I particularly like the last four lines, though it's hard to put my finger on why. They kind of jibe inside me, and I can't put it into words properly. God this new comment following you up the page is handy, I can read while I type -- now. It jibes with me because it is well written and true. Like De Ja Vu, when you know you're going down a wrong path but can't stop yourself. Well done -- check out my latest and first in two years at:

  • Knight70
    October 30, 2007

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    Brilliant take on the prompt....

    being drawn in like a moth to a flame
    fear creeps in the shadows while evil breathes down my neck

    memories flash to different places in time
    my past lives are mixing with the present.

    realizing this is a warning left by myself once upon a time
    stating clearly to escape unless I wish to repeat the same mistakes.


    Congratulations on the silver! It was well-deserved. This piece definitely got me thinking. I love the concept of a past life version of yourself warning you not to make the same mistakes. There is so much to be said about karma in this. Very well done indeed!! Knight70



    • delightfulmess silver member
      October 30, 2007
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      Oh thank you so much for this lovely comment. This is a dear one to me. So you great comment means alot


  • Swan song gold member
    October 20, 2007
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    Yes dear you have sung a lovely her. Well done I enjoyed it and it took a bit of my breath away.


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 11, 2007

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    oh and you say my poems are great
    I come upon this gem hiding away and you know it is awesome to boot

    Riftkin
  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    This is oh wow amazing. I dont know how this manage to get past me Where you hiding it.
    being drawn in like a moth to a flame
    fear creeps in the shadows while evil breathes down my neck
    memories flash to different places in time
    my past lives are mixing with the present.


    Very nice indeed


  • penman gold member
    August 7, 2007
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    Excellent

    Oh my this was great. A fantastic take on the prompt.


  • aliceramone silver member
    August 7, 2007
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    great take on the prompt!...great imagery and language!


  • Griswold
    August 7, 2007
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    Well, hurry up dammit, I got to go to work!!!

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