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Summer

What is summer's warming glow
to winter's silent snow?
Untouched beauty, pure and clean
Surrounded by serenity

Whatever is the sultry sun
to spring’s blooming tree?
To see the world veer to vigour
Marvelling at life to be

What is summer's searing beams
to autumn's silver streams?
Cleaning up for life to come
Reflecting over mysteries

Yet summer does
Sheen with glee
A favourite
Time to be

I’ll tell you child, I’ll let you know
what summer means to me
The season's secret, Is great indeed,
for summer sets your spirit free
It brings you that
which you too in time,
might come to see
as your most precious
memory
a flawless feeling
unrestricted joy
experiencing
your first
love.

Author notes

A happy summer poem whos purpouse is to share the feeling I get from thinking of summer, based on personal expiriences.

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  • midnight-lily
    October 17, 2007

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    Overall love the feeling of this poem.

    But shouldn't it be "to winter's silent snow" instead of "winters"
    and "secret,Is" maybe "secret, is"?

    But amazing <3

  • carole21
    October 14, 2007
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    personal and sweet

    seasons can influence . . congratulations


  • Midnight Lace
    October 2, 2007

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    I am so glad that I have come across this beautiful poem. I just had the best summer of my life, and the words that you have penned here feels as if you were reading my thoughts. Its amazing the way summertime can make a person feel. The warm sun upon your skin, the clear blue skies that make you feel as if anything is possible. Thank you for describing the season of summer so wonderfully and letting me know that I am not the only one who feels this way!
    midnight lace


  • Silly Rabbit.
    September 30, 2007

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    Very bright and emotional. I love it. Your sense of rhyme was great, but it kind of fell apart in the end. But overall it was a wonderful piece and I enjoyed reading it.
    Keep up the good work.


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    September 3, 2007
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    Unique.

    Wow,brilliant background,quite attractive!!!

    An uplifting piece!


  • raspberry Greeters member
    September 3, 2007

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    A very fine attempt.. Thankyou for taking time to share it with us in our contest.. Wishing you luck keep writing..


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    August 31, 2007
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    Well, not bad


    Not bad.


  • ForgottenMemories
    August 30, 2007

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    wow I loved your poem, It was so interesting and I loved how it was based on the summer, and a summer love at the end. It is a very well written poem. Well done and good luck in the contest!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 27, 2007

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    wow i love this, i think i'm jealous that is so grand!

    Nothing sounds wrong, all the wording percise and flows well..it was a true plesure to read!
    Good luck, loved it, as i'm sure lot of people do!

    stephanie

  • maggy1126
    August 23, 2007

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    I really liked your poem it was very nicely done, I really love the part when you said
    The season’s secret, Is great indeed,
    for summer sets your spirit free

    i find that to be true indeed


  • LionessK silver member
    August 21, 2007

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    welcome to allpoetry

    I agree with Despair.. you almost make me rethink my favorite season with your words. I like how you set this up and let each line flow.. nicely done. Thank you for entering the (new members) conetst. Best of luck to you.


    ~Kristy


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    I loved this piece. I like how you compared and contrasted summer to the other seasons winter, spring, and fall. I definately think that really made your poem even more powerful. And the last stanza was ended beautifully, being that this was about a first summer love. I don't have a favourite line because I like the whole poem. Keep up the great writing! Best of luck and thanks for entering


  • forbidden-colour
    August 21, 2007

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    I loved how this started;


    "What is summer’s warming glow
    to winters silent snow"

    Finalist.
    Thank you for entering, best of luck!

    X--Lullaby


  • Despairkitty
    August 17, 2007

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!

    Great job. I think that I shall have to get inspired and write a poem about my favorite season after reading this. Of course, mine is the opposite, but I think you did such a lovely job with this I like summer a little better today. I wish you luck in the contest.
    Despair


  • Jalalbad gold member
    August 13, 2007
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    what a poem!

    Wow wow wow is all I can say. This brought to memory of my first love.
    Smile,
    Judy


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    simply beautiful

    this reminds me of a woman with child talking to it through the months,I love the serenity of it thank you for entering and good luck...PM


  • Mezclita
    August 9, 2007

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    "U r my sunshine my only sunshine u make me happy"... lol, yes u sure did with this one! Beautifully written + presentation's hot too


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    August 8, 2007

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    Hello. I really love the application of criteria in this one. You give the reader a chance to engage oneself to the common experience.

    Using nice descriptives, you very effectively use contrasts and comparisons that run uniform and parallel without being redundant! Good for you there.

    Form is excellent for this content.

    "Yet summer does
    Sheen with glee
    A favourite
    Time to be "<---- Although I realize what you're trying to chorus, I would place this with a different entrance word or leave it out. It has a tendency to appear inserted, and with the antiquated term of'glee' , winds the intensity down. I'd probably save it for another poem, and leave it out. Personal preference.
    Otherwise, it's a very nice piece.

    *Should you edit/alter, please let us know so we
    can review it.

    Thank you and welcome to the site!

    • Cirion
      August 8, 2007
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      Thanks for the feedback regarding the "glee" verse, its there to bind the two main parts together. I did wonder if it would sound natural to people who actually speak English. I will leave it in, for now at least, because I feel the poem sounds strange without it. And I don't like changing stuff because one person does not enjoy it that much I might change it if I feel its does not fit, something that might happen after feedback like yours. Appreciated.

  • biggles
    August 7, 2007

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    I can completely relate to this poem and I just thought it was beautiful. Ah! I wish I could write as well as you, you manipulate words so divinely. Really good luck in the contest.
    Biggles.

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