Dreams
open
concealed doors
to alternate
worlds.
Author notes
This is a Lanturne; my first one. The lanturn is a poem with syllable counts of: 1,2,3,4,1. The resulting shape is supposed to look like a Japanese lanturn...but words are funny things, and don't always want to. Enjoy! (A poem by Zephyr Aryn...no preference...)
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Interested, I like the form you used and it's a great piece
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Another style I've never heard of. I have learned so much on AP. You have captured this one beautifully. Spot on description of Dreams.
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OOOH, even though its only a few words its perfectly written 
NICE job!
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Lovely words, these are a great form to use, even if the words you use do not make the shape of the poem, these still are loveley thoughts.
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Very true, and it was short. When you sleep the mind is open to many different things, why do you think you jump in your sleep in the middle of the night? Someone is touching you and talking to you from another world. I think you should make this idea into something more. Work with it for the worlds within worlds are a amazing place to be.
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Im not sure
It feels more like a single sentance than anything else. I like it, but its jsut so short. Though most of my poetry is freeverse and almost as short. -
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Well, that's the way the form is- if you looked at my author's notes.
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nice...i;ve never heard of one of those befoe so you've enlightened me..i love the message too
take care xxx
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