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- Flowered Familiarity -

 

 

 

I.        

Dreamer went sight seeing with Muse
on quest to find flower

imbedded within Sacred waters;

encircled by Lotus, immortalized in granite

and only recognized by Soul Seeker

who volunteered to hold heavy burden
of another on mortal shoulders

without complaint from conscious
or unconscious as unity,  merge of Minds
aided Angels to bridge gaps

where rivets loosened, relationships spiraled

until healing could begin

and not end but evolve
Man from primates to super power
yet hindrances held reigns,
steered direction of winds current,  called shots
instead of Spirit speaking for self;

Man locked freedom in closet,  closed door
so fear instead,  reigned supreme.



II.

Years accumulated to minutes as monsters
preyed with patience,  feasted on emotions
until lapses in judgment jeopardized advancement,
quality of Life lived

while others watched disintegration of Dreams
become the burden instead of blessing.
 

Roles switched,  pain swaddled
next to bosom as acts of kindness
turned chore.

Pleasure became unbearable to understand
also relived in real world
for foe removed mask at night,
revealed nemesis underneath,  neck up
covered by cloak.

Tables rotated,  musical numbers a mirage
on piano blurred melody into melancholy;
instrumental lullaby lost
where the sun never set
because the Mind told it so
which Spirit believed.



III.

Twenty four hours in a day lasted longer,
sixty seconds drowned in pools by the minute
as decisions to cross threshold threatened
the very existence of energy within

also treasured teased on other side
to tempt tongue for a lap
of the purest waters,  the eyes envisioned
but through the mist lay mud;

caked in residue of should have, could have
and wished self had done

while mosquitoes with malaria gifts,  huddled
in circles for near perfect person
to cross their path.

Instructions written in scrolls scavenged
for later look through cracked spectacles
reversed letters and distorted drawings,
obstructed opportunities of success.



IV.

The negative perception perpetrated excuses,
combed hair sideways so sight blinded;
face contorted to controversial hieroglyphs
painted in personality’s ink~

detoured with duress, burden on steroids
increased in mass also movements slowed
to a crawl.

Ability to please with vigilant purpose
was warped in tunnel vision
till shoulders given break,  back massaged
so ache alleviated to an extent

everyday embraced reason to Live
with sincere smile
alongside paved avenue freed of shards
from disappointments once mirrored

when Man made spiritual advancements
in consciously caged arena
after beast brought to its knees
and fears finally tamed.





   

 

Author notes

Username: Desire

Prompt: Flirtations

perspecitve I took...Flirtations
of the Dark nature...

and its repercussions of *playing* Spirit
within this game..

Some people play with Darkness,
are tempted, flirt back...
then find the flower does not smell
as sweet...

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  • poetryality silver member
    August 15, 2007

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    Darkness can be tempting but the results of the game are usually unkind. You took the prompt to an unexpected level and came out on top. Your poem flirts well with the dark side my dear. There is so much here, so many levels. I love the numbered stanzas. Each section plays well on its own and collectively. Your imagery is amazingly vivid. This is an exquisite work.

    Thank you for following all the rules of the contest, and for this brilliant entry. I wish you well.

    Always ♥

    Renee


  • Tangled Angle
    August 14, 2007

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    There is so much depth to this... it is amazing and so interesting.. It's flawless in my eyes.

    If you're not one of the top poets this round there's something very, very wrong.

    You and Laura did amazingly well. I wish you luck.


  • Arkbear gold member
    August 14, 2007

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    Sissy ~

    First off.....I am in awe of this write ~

     

    Secondly, if this had not been an...*Anythings* Round,

    I think I would have hit you on length, as you have

    gathered your Ink & Quill and gone over to the

    Epic corner to write ~

     

    However.....I am still reliving some incredible

     moments you just penned ~

     

    The Imagery is outstanding!

    I can't critique this in a harsh manner, as it would

    not be justifiable to this piece of Art ~

     

    I do hope you lasso your thoughts a bit,

    and watch out for the *run-on* Themes ~

     

    There are some Powerful lines here....I wish I had the money

    to publish your work...as it rightfully deserves ~

     

    Just FYI....I liked I & V the best ~

     

    Best of luck Hun ~

     

    Bears score:   98.7

     

     


  • luckynsincere
    August 14, 2007

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    This is interesting to say the very least! It is absoultely not what I expected! Flirtaions... yet you took that to a WHOLE other level! WEll done my friend This week the judging will be ever hard! seeing as it will be only a few points that will determine the fate of the finals Tough! You guys are just tough!!!

    98



    mel


  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    August 14, 2007

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    excellent. the images here are amazing and like the darker undertone being finally drowned out by the light. love this. one awesome piece here.


  • penman gold member
    August 7, 2007
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    Excellent

    Oh my sweetness this was so amazing. You did it so well. Best of luck in the challenges


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    Mosquito's with Malaria gifts! That was not a pleseant image!!ha! This was exquisite work from you Missy. Excellent, excellent, excel-lent! ~Tia


  • cherche -d -ame
    August 7, 2007

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    whoa girl , you went to the DEPTH with this one. For some reason I never thought of flirtation as being of the DARK , but you brought it to LIGHT [pun intended]

    your language is very eloquent [as is the entire write in itself]And you did give me something to think about this evening.

    There is no doubt you raised the bar in this contest [I have not read any others yet] , but IMHO they will have to be danged good to beat this one. I wish you the best of luck , even though my instincts tell me it is not needed.

    Have a pleasant evening sweetie,
    much and Blessed Be always,
    xoxoxoxoxoxo
    reenie


  • Amera gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    Wow! You really out did yourself girlfriend! This is fantastic! The verbiage that smoothly leads to an emotional escapade of flirtation is amazing.

    Bravo

    Love,
    Amera ♥


  • HeavenScent4U
    August 7, 2007

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    wow Twiny, this is something so indepth that it's a little hard to fathom. yes, many people flirt with darkness, some find out it is the side of cruel intentions, others enjoy it sad but true. thise is very vivid and leaves images so deep. very well done.

    best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed


  • StarEyes
    August 7, 2007

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    HOLY MOLY!!!!!!!

    WOW!!! Girl, what a read this one is!!!! Holy Smokes!!!! I was glued to the screen and could not stop reading!!! This is incredible!!!! I love this one!! Best of luck in this contest!!!!!


    an much love

    Nettie


  • Bedroom Eyes
    August 7, 2007

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    Ya know Hun...this has tones to it that I have seen recently, as you well know. I am indeed curious as to the inspiration of this piece. If it is as I believe it to be, then I an simply in awe of how this turned out.

    A glimpse into a place that few see...and fewer yet understand. A well written masterpiece

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