Upon dry cheeks
runs life's lament
like an invisible stream.
Author notes
night reflection is in fuming pain
A contest entry
- quickie--- 10x10x10 by layla..
300 points, ended August 7, 2007, 6 entries
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems' Wanted!! by SignifyingNothing.
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Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Very well done, succinct but poignant.
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only ten words, yet so mysterious and meaningful. i'm creating my own story behind it and wanting to know what's going to happen. this is what i wanted. great poem!
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Congratulations..you are a finalist!
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Very well said....I could see myself using this as a quote somewhere
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This is really powerful. Such a descriptive poem about simple tears.... it captures the emotion of sadness and sorrow so well. I see you won a trophy for this, it was well deserved..."life's lament" is great alliteration...really an overall great poem, with a lingering sadness that will stay with me. Nicely done, and thanks for entering.
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Very deep, full of emotions a lot is said in these few words thank you for entering
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Well penned!
Thanks for entering...
Write on!
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A very nice write. Good flow and tone. Nice simile. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice descriptives. Best wishes in the contest.
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add a semicolon ( after lament, and take away "like" ... and this will be absolutely perfect
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Really nice write, the flow was perfect. Best of luck in the contest
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This poem that you have written paints a very vivid picture. I really like the symbolism in it.
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read rules
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I was thinking “life’s lament” might be tears which would not be invisible but I guess it could be ‘the cares of life’ which could – while being invisible – indeed leave its track. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I love poetry that only has to have few words to express so much emotion. You did well here with this short verse. It says so much of the pain you suffer. I am sorry to know that pain exists for you. I hope things get better. A very emotional work of poetry. Well penned.
Candice
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This is good. I like the second line. Very creative with beautiful imagery. I never read this one before.
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I really like this, beautifully expressed with few words, thank you for this entry
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Ten words that speak to the heart in such an emotional way is impressive. You have done an excellent job of expressing these feelings my friend. I see the tear stained face, and hear the silent cries. Sometimes we need to let others know our pain. In that we might get the help we so long for. Very sad poetry but very beautifully written.
I hope you are well my friend.
April
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This poem is filled with emotions and imagery. It amazes me how much can be said with so few words. You have mastered that skill with this poetry. Brilliant!
Always Loveing YOU ♥
Mom
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this is great.
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Too true; we never know who is crying on the inside. Thanks for entering this introspective piece.
DancingRed.
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Wow--- brilliant take on the prompt.
You have portrayed a beauty
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Another wonderful, tasteful write! Different write and take on the prompt. I'm impressed with the imagery and brainwave that has run through you! Well done
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