grapes are great, but quit grouching
grumpy grandmas greeting me with greens
grinning and grabbing greedily, I say
artichokes are for adolescents
anyone who ate one argues against
me, always I am an antagonist
poor me, peas make me want to puke, and
poke pens into paper, pressure to pry
into private places of proud prose
this tangle of turnips teases,
torments, tortures with tweezers too
they are trying with great trouble to
troop trash towards my torpid tongue!
Author notes
Hmm, not sure if this was what you meant, but I sure had fun!
A contest entry
- How Green is my Valley by NurseChilly.
440 points, ended August 24, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwink!
Well this was quite the tongue twister, I dare you to repeat it three times real fast. Wonderful alliterations here. Best to you
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I love those poems with a sort Victorian, earthy, nonsensical ring...thanks for reminding me that poetry is first of all fun!
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What you need is my CAT FOOD
I sell to cats, but in your case
I'll make an exception for your brood
Out of the whole human race
You'll gulp it down and lap it up
It's all the stuff most humans don't eat
I'll have you drinking from my cup
Blood and guts, oh, what a treat
Tiki Cat
Buy Tiki's Gourmet Cat Food
"Too Good For Humans"
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I love what you do that with rhythm consonants, this poem reads like a snare drum, like it a lot.
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this made me smile Kevin... long time since I saw you around here... and to my surprise this made me chortle..
very very very verdantly smilingly good
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Nice job from the contest prompt. good luck.
♥
whisper
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ROFL! A nice twist on a garden of vegetables. Darn, I know someone growing turnips, next time I visit I hope they dont torture poor me!
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Excellent use of alliteration and assonance. The poem seemed perfectly planned and thought-out. Wonderful references of veggies. Artichokes are disgusting, especially to the adolescent. But then again, I don’t like most vegetables. This was a great poem. Best of luck in the contest.
- Andi
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