stones are solid, but
weep when the rain is
neverending, such
passion without a
clear goal - my resolve
begins to break
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Just a short lil thing
Please tell me what you think
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you're an amazing writer
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This piece speaks of a passion that has been dented. It tells me that someone who thought they were strong has tumbled and finds themselves humbled by their own being. I love the use of the words in this write and how you managed to make them sound like they were sighing. Excellent work.
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Hoodwinked!!
I like the use of the image of stones. An obvious but still often forgotten part of our world. I don't know if I would use the word solid or if I would use something stronger, but it's just my opinion. Maybe something like unemotional or impassive since you mention weeping which would be a contradiction that you're using here. If that last sentence I just wrote doesn't make any sense, let me know. :]
~M~
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Hood Winked!!
Yeah a 'short lil thing' was a random selection.
oh so many levels I can relate with here .... walking on the edge of flood waters i can understand the breaking. I like the depth of wisdom I feel it an inspiration for living. Simple words that all can understand lingering in reflective thoughts. Thank you. No lonely poems
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Such a great and simple poem Kevin. Its true, we cannot chase our dreams and utilize our passion without a light to guide. There is no way we would survive. Keep writing and running this great site!
"The truest soul knows no age, like a tree of thought watching over."
-roti
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brevity offers much, i think. when trying to explain one's soul, its condition - too many words get in the way. Very nice poem, Kevin - maybe take a break from site issues for a moment or two and write more oftener than you do.
Blessings and best wishes,
~richard
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