back in the day
it wasn't enough
I wanted more E-mails
but now I look back, I think
that was bloody brilliant!
you told me
I was the first rank
hooray! I beamed within myself
I only feel the pain now
remember the days
it was weird
what with me
giving you my "mini masterpieces"
you must have thought
I was a retard
no wonder
there ain't nothing left here
not anymore
but it's ok
there once was
I have to move on
since I have been banished from your life
A contest entry
- Time is Tearing me Away by thorlorn thanatos.
490 points, ended August 11, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It has alot of meaning to it... I'm just not keen on the phrasing.
Thankyou and good luck in the contest!!
Ryan -
Oh... this piece was rather beautiful... I could relate the to this poem!!
And i totally looooove the last 2 lines...
How real!?!?! Gosh... this is just a very beautiful piece...
Yea mate.. u just gotta get a move one with life!
When someone doesn't accept you for who you are... I don't see why you still have to stick on to them!!
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yea but what can we do when that person is so nice to you and you know their friendship is true?
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Yea... i know its hard to leave someone you've loved... But it's all a part of our life... So what if she's not beside you now, talking to you or somethin like that, she'll always remain in your heart right...
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