Heart strings-
strum in silence.
Reposed,
beside you I wept.
A few minutes ago,
I witnessed-
a handful of stars die.
Now, all that is left-
your sheet of sunlight,
and my broken heart.
Author notes
Topic: Depression
This is my take on the topic which is a bit emotionally broken and damned. Hope you'll enjoy reading this.
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Awww this makes me feel so sad. I have felt this way myself, it hurts bad and it leaves you apathetic and lost for a long time, at best.
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Yes I did enjoy reading this - your images are great. The thought of dying stars is simultaneously a most sad and beautiful thing.
The heart-strings mentioning is very clever.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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I love sheet of sunlight... so powerful and strong. Deep and heartfelt. Thank you for sharing your words of sorrow and emotion.
Luv,
~Candy
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This is so heartbroken and yet the poem has heartfelt emotions that are so pure that I could cry…now this is depression at its finest display…
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enjoyed it
This poem leaves me with a question. It has a vivid and sad image. The language use is beautiful with phrases like 'your sheet of sunlight.'
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