I'm lost in the confusion
My mind has not eased
The wind may be blowing
But has yet swayed the trees
Clocks, they continue to tick-tock
Through my thoughts and far-off memories
Framiliar grows their rythmical beat
as the pace of the shore of the distant seas
My eyes they wander
through the forests
i've forgotten
memories...
memories flooded
through the many oceans
i find to have bound me
I urge myself to continue
just keep uttering words
Words with out meaning
thoughts flying with the birds
Keep your mind working
Find what can they cannot
They- the liars that have hidden away
all that lies to be forgot.
The distance to be traveled,
Unnerving to have lost
Wondering, searching
Trying to remember- but at what cost?
Author notes
something i radomly wrote nothing special really... it sounds good at the moment but i'm half asleep,lol.
Blah, I felt like posting something. no specifics.
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It's been awhile since I've read updates from you, and I'm liking what I read.
But I guess your sleepy state is showing through, since you forgot spell check =P
Please check line 3 of stanza 2 for 2 typos.
Stanza 2 is my favorite.
The 2nd-to-last stanza sounds awkward. "Be forgotten" feels grammatically correct, but doesn't match the rhyme, so you do what you want ^.~
Just wondering:
Is the shift from using "I" to "i" to "I" again representative of a shift of mentality, or is it just accidental?
I feel like this poem would read better w/ punctuation, but maybe not.
I like this one a lot. It really reflects the title "Wondering Thoughts". The rapidly transitioning images give me that daydream reverie feel.
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