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Paradox

Like lightning leaving its mark on the Earth's surface,
your now forgotten love is etched on my heart eternally.
The smoldering embers of this hatred engulf my very existence,
leaving me charred and choking on life.

Like a steady stream of smoke,

I swirl aimlessly away from everyone and anyone.

Afraid to once again be smothered by my own insecurities,

I let myself fade to ashes and be carried away in this whirlwind called 'Life'. 

My remains are scattered randomly among nothing and I simply blend into the background,

waiting to be forgotten. 

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  • Sarah957
    August 11, 2007

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    Wow this is intense! Yıu chose an excellent metaphor to express yourself, it comes off beautifully. My favorite lines are-

    leaving me charred and choking on life.

    Afraid to once again be smothered by my own insecurities,

    and

    I let myself fade to ashes and be carried away in this whirlwind called 'Life'.

    My remains are scattered randomly among nothing




  • fathom me
    August 7, 2007

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    Hey Rox..
    Being emotionally intense has its costs (U know well I can say this..) Its easy (I feel; as is/ has been for me) to be wanting to be forgotten, than facing all the pain and fear of how we'll be in the future with once beloved people.. but one thing I've learnt- its never as bad as we may think.. staying in the middle between fear and optimistic hope doesnt come easy.. But I think you'll reach out soon.. cause you dont seem to be the kind to live in fear.
    Excellent communication Rox.. great work.. someday you'll look back and be happy you had this journey so early in life.. maybe not today, but someday soon surely..
    Huggles, Love, Warmth and Courage~~~


  • wattle silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    Ms Roxy, what is this? You, dear lady are not forgotten, nor could you ever be. Too many people depend on you for there daily happiness, surely that alone should make those lips of yours curly on the edges (smile) from the pleasure of being needed. --- God you’re a clever poet, I’m sure this poem was put here to wind me up, to give you a good laugh. (It worked this end) ----- Thank you ----- --- You’re OK Ms Roxy ----- My title pick; ‘Paradox’


    • roxyhope
      August 7, 2007

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      Hmm... I think sometimes we all wish we could be forgotten--overlooked. Think Im just going through a blue spell. Unfortunately those still attack me from time to time. Thank you for the wonderful title.