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Brown Eyes

 

Their love was early
and obvious,
as she threw her tiny arms
around his frame,
smiling brown eyes
said it all.

 

And he...
with a shy smile
grinned as he recalled
the days they had spent together
playing in the sandbox.

 

 

Now, twenty years from then,
she throws her arms around him
again, as he lifts her into his arms,
her white pearled gown flowing
brown eyes still smiling
and his eyes only for her.

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  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    August 27, 2007
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    What a sweet piece! I love the border, too!

  • star wars fanatic
    August 19, 2007

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    Aw, that's sweet. I remember a pic I have like this of myself and my best friend when we were in pre-school. We pretended to get married and had lemonade and pizza at our reception! Anyway, nicely written and laid out.


    • pattyann4500
      August 19, 2007
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      I used to wrestle with the little boy I thought I'd marry. Of course, he always beat me up, but I told him that I had let him win just to make him mad. We never got to the honeymoon stage. lol


  • Sweet Jane
    August 11, 2007
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    so lovely poem


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    Oh, this was so beautiful. Is this a true story? That is such a wonderful and touching sentiment. Excellent job.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


    • pattyann4500
      August 8, 2007
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      Not a true story, yet, but look at the smile on that little girl's face and that "Yes, I'm her man" look on his. Thank you. Hugs, Patricia


  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 7, 2007
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    How wonderful

    beautiful story of love. I know people like this, and they still are there


    • pattyann4500
      August 8, 2007
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      Isn't it wonderful when two people know from such a young age that they're supposed to be together for life! This isn't a true story yet, but it looks like it could be.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    Oh you have penned excellent words for my son and
    his friend. I am going to save all these entries I think and make a little scrap book. I am not sure yet I just know you did a wonderful job. Wouldnt suprise me in the least if this came true.

    delila


    • pattyann4500
      August 7, 2007
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      The least you will be doing with a scrap book is giving them wonderful memories whether they become more than friends or just remain good friends. What a wonderful picture. I'm just glad I could be a part of this wonderful moment. The innocence of a childhood friendship is so precious. Hugs, Patricia

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    This is such a sweet write True love can make it through anything. Very sweet poem indeed. Best wishes


  • The Poetic Angel
    August 7, 2007
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    awww patrica this is cute i love it xxx cheeky xxx


  • leo2
    August 7, 2007

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    Sounds like a fairy tale come true. Congratulations to the lovely couple and thanks to you for sharing their story with me. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • pattyann4500
      August 7, 2007
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      I guess some fairy tales do come true. I don't necessarily believe in them myself, but I do believe in happy endings.


  • SexyAngel0418
    August 7, 2007

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    wow.... This is awesome gramma!!! YOu did a great job on this!!! I really love this poem!!! It is so sweet!!! Good luck in the contest!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • Watuwant silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    My 4 year old son has a best friend named Shane, and they both claim that they'll be married some day. We'll see, of course, but this poem makes me think of them, and how happy they are together. Strange how life can work, at times. Nicely written, pattyann.
    peace
    doug


    • pattyann4500
      August 7, 2007
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      I guess you'll not know until the time comes, Doug. Children sometimes hold to their promises. Umm, just thought I'd make you feel good about it all. lol

  • Bob Fox
    August 7, 2007
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    Like a song

    Always we can welcome the warmth of a growing love. & you have stilled the hearts


  • UnManned4Ever
    August 7, 2007

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    This is sooo cute and it really is a great write cause it paints a picture int he readers mind. Once again as always great piece!!!


    • pattyann4500
      August 7, 2007
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      Thanks, Annie. Aren't they just adorable! At one point in nearly every child's life there is that one little person who wants to marry them when they grow up. I just adored this picture. Hugs, Patricia


  • micol
    August 7, 2007

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    you nicely avoid over-sentimentality but concentrating on things not emotions. Arms, eyes, sandbox, pearls--all come together nicely. And the poem fits the picture perfectly.


    • pattyann4500
      August 7, 2007
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      Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I felt that over-sentimentality would have taken away from the innocense. Patricia


  • Roaddog Wolf
    August 7, 2007
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    good write

    It seems difficult to not see them growing old together they are really cute nice write


    • pattyann4500
      August 7, 2007
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      Glad you liked it. Aren't they just too cute together. Love in her sweet eyes and his so serious.

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