The light glittered
from the quaint lamp outside,
only my Goddess was seen
for the room mattered not
when she was here;
I knew not when she had come
nor not why
but that mattered little.
Her skin bronzed
almost golden
gave her an omnipotent quality.
My heart raced,
my soul burned
while fairies of lust and love
invaded my mind.
She didn't move,
merely knelled there,
even heard me
then turned softly
with movements no angel could copy;
looked~ stared deep into my jaded eyes.
There was no need for words,
I assure you no words
could ever tell you what we felt
Her skin brushed mine
with warmth as our lips touched,
soft warm and wet;
as electricity rushed through
like the bliss of eternal paradise.
We reached for the stars
in hopes they would be ours,
sounds of our voices
like angel choirs.
She and I sang long into the night,
seconds before dawn.
The halo of the sun,
surrounded her
and from that moment on,
I knew that this was no mere woman,
more a Goddess.
Author notes
I hope this will slate your thirst.
A contest entry
- Sensual Quills ~ Men Only! by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended August 9, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Je l'aime. I like the fact that it's soft and tender
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O my goddess
Beautifully written piece of work you got here. Great write! <3 ya
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A lovely piece you have penned. Wonderful imagery throughout as well. Keeping it soft and tender as it should be. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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Damnit! How can I leave a compelling review after Mummy been here?! Her comments are so sweet and encouraging. *tries not to pinch Mommy Dearest*
I really love your message in this lil bro. It was a beautiful story told here. I just kept getting distracted by all of the commas. Couldn't you used something else instead of that or nothing at all in places? Don't get me wrong. I love your poem; but I felt it took away from your words.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest, lil bro.
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Wow!
Powerful piece Sweet One and what images You have brought forth
Wooooooo hoooooooooo
Love this verse and the Journey You take the senses~
Magnificent!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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wow!
you amazed me here. lol. really descriptive piece of yours . the sounds of our voices,
like angel choirs.
I loved thoses lines. good job.
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We reached for the stars,
Hoping they would be ours
i liked that part.
goddess. i like that word. i really liked this poem. i hope you do well in the contest.
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