I said I didn't want your friendship
Because what I wanted was your love.
But I lied about all of that too
So it wasn't me you'd think of.
I doubted the way I felt for you.
And I still think you deserve better.
But I'm praying you feel it too,
And are willing to tough out the weather.
I pushed you away, but wanted you close.
What was a want, has now become a need.
I tried fighting the feeling but realized
After the trouble, I'd have to concede.
I'm falling apart, it's breaking me down.
Who would have known I wouldn't stay strong?
I thought I had the answer for us
But I must admit that I got it all wrong.
Sending you off didn't fix me at all.
Infact I feel more lost on the inside.
I'm hoping you answer your phone tonight
And I can explain all I've denied.
A contest entry
- Show me you understand! by Poet of Dreams.
450 points, ended August 12, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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I absolutely love this poem. "I'm hoping you answer your phone tonight And I can explain all I've denied." is definatly an amazing way to end this one. I can totally picture it and it's something I can relate to. I also like how you talk about pushing the person away and then trying to get them to answer so you can explain yourself, since that happens to people quite a bit. Great Job! can't wait to read more.
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Well penned, Dear Poet.
You have a way with wording Angst.
It's honest and relatable.
I have a suggestion for you, as well..
so I'll Messenger it to you.
~Chaos
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the emotion and the message are so perfect! but sadly your rhyme scheme is off a bit. you have AbAb ryhmes in one verse then AbAc ryhmes in another. very distracting, especialy to me. so however the message and the emotion is perfect, the form leaves to be desired. great poem either way. good luck
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