Run Away
Just leave us alone
We were fine just before you came into our home.
You scream and yell
Bitch and moan,
About what’s not right.
But who are you to say?
Its not all about you,
You blame everything on someone else
To make yourself feel better
But you are the one that causes the problems.
Maybe you don’t see it but everyone else does.
So open your eyes and look around, see what you are about to lose
So just run away and leave us alone,
We were better off that way!
Please tell me what you think
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wow i love it in most parts it relates to me...
well im brandi like along time ago we talked about the peom about my dad. well hopeing we could talk more comment one of my poems or somthing k? thanks
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WOW! Wicked!
That is one deep out-pour of emotion.. I can see you opening the door and yelling at whoever this person is. I like this poem, the first three lines made it feel as if it could be a song.. I hope you can make another version in lyric version. The first stanza here can be your chorus. (but that's just a suggestion)
Keep on writing,
Nooni
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wow.great emotion.I like how the poem has feelings. It flows very well and has a great point which is easy to understand.Well Done!!
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sounds like someone needs to leave ASAP...
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wow lots of emotion you are doing well in your emotions but i would add some imagdry in the next few to give it more feeling bc if you can see something clearly in your minds eye then it has more feeling behind it bc the reader is experenceing it for themselves...good write
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mmm, angry...grrrr! lol This is great as far as getting the feelings down on paper and all that. But the color scheme...ugh lol jk jk.
Seriously though, it's a great poem (colors and all) and I'm glad you shared.
Love always
Your Shade
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