We fought,
I screamed,
you left,
and I laughed and told you I was better off.
You called,
I cried,
you said you missed me,
that second I died.
Again I screamed,
forget me now and go away,
hung up the phone and cried some more,
with only my dead laughter ringing.
I drank away my tears,
screamed away my stupidity,
fell to my knees and prayed to die,
because I knew you'd never return.
I knew you still cared,
but you still laughed when I still died,
died with the secret the only one I was ever able to keep,
that I still truly love you.
You hurt me terribly,
and I wanted to hurt you back,
but I wanted you happy,
so I said goodbye.
Goodbye to looking at the stars,
to giggling insanely together,
to making funny faces at each other,
to laughing and crying with each other.
Goodbye to this, and that, and to most of all,
that dead laughter still ringing in my ears.
A contest entry
- Show me you understand! by Poet of Dreams.
450 points, ended August 12, 2007, 10 entries
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Comments
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loved the emotion and i loved the power you put into this piece. i am not horribly fond of free-verse, but your raw emotion and power make up for that a bit. a very well written piece, thanks for understanding. good luck
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This piece of writing had a lot of feeling, in my opinion. My most favorite part was the last two lines. I could fairly connect with this poem, not as well as others might, but enough. I thought that it could use a little bit of better word choice, even though it was well written, but I did like how you combined the words dead and laughter. To me, it sounds sort of dream like, or nightmare like in this case, because of the sadness. Anyway, nice work, and good luck in the contest!!
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