She
Sat still
Knowing that
Her smooth image
Created a crazed
Passion that would not cease
Within her lover that froze
At the sight of her seductive
Outline that demanded attention
She knew it would entice a desire
To see her, he barely contained himself
He pursued this goddess for ages
It seemed as she ran through his dreams
His desires and pleasures
Still he blinked to believe
This reality
And this beauty
He now knew
Would be
his
Author notes
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can
also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. Get creative and write an Etheree with
more than one verse, but follow suit with an inverted syllable count.
Reversed Etheree: 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
In a list
A contest entry
- Sensual Quills ~ Men Only! by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended August 9, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Beginning of Essence 2 Males Only by Mrs LadyEnthralling.
450 points, ended September 26, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow,that was so great, you are very good at writing poetry and you make your words come alive and they seem to just touch your soul when you read them that was really great keep on doing great work
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Thank U - appreciate the kind words. I'm trying to get back in the swing
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i really thought this was beautiful and a gentle portrayal of desire,longing and lust,like the shape of the poem too x
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way to look at the piece. Thank you
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Wow. Neat. I don't believe that I've read a double etheree until now. A terrific job, I see...looking at what you have in your author comments. What a sensual poem...all about need and finally having what one desired. Good job.
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Its another one of those, "Can I do this?" And it creates a great image as well.
Thx ~ Mykeee
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nicwe form here i liked it hon i think you did a very great job penning this you had very passionate finger tips good luck
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thanks sweetie
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Hot, Hot and Sizzling
Did I say that this poem is hot? Well if i didin't it is a burning through that screen, you done a great job as always, the form is perfect, I can not begin to imagine what you have written if the form had not constricted what you could say, but I can read between the lines. Wonderful write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
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thanks - you are right (U know me too well)I wanted to expand that thought out but I've been trying to expand my thoughts to other things and do a few sensual pieces every now and again. I thank U for stopping by ~ the pleasure was mine ~ mikeeeee
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A very well written piece you have here. Although, a Double Etheree has 20 lines and you have 21. Lines seventeen and eighteen both contain four syllables which has added an extra line to this form. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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OUCH!!! How di I miss that !?!?!?! Thank U. On my way to correct it ~ mikey
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thank you - the contest was interesting so BOOM!!! this came out. Thank ya ~ MyKeY
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Well OH my. That was just lovely and I do love an etheree. Well done. ~Pamela
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