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Why Did You Do This?

I was violated,
Penetrated,
Sickened,

And Disturbed.

 

I'm sickened by my own body,

I just want to rip my skin off,

And start over new.

 

You penetrated me,

And you hurt me,

You took something I couldn't get back.

 

All the disturbing images,

All I see when I look at you,

How you violated me,

And I couldn't do nothing to stop you.

 

I pushed,

You shoved me back down,

And took my virginity,

You enjoyed my pain.

I could tell cause the smile on your face,

And the look in your eyes.

 

When you got done with my body,

I just curled up and cried,

You said as you walked out the door,

I'm not done with you yet,

Next time,

Be more resistant,

I love a good chase.

 

I feel so sick,

I feel so used,

I feel so dirty,

I want to rip my skin,

And start over new.

And my reason is you.

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I was raped Back in april...

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  • black lagoon x
    May 9

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    When you got done with my body,
    I just curled up and cried,
    You said as you walked out the door,
    I'm not done with you yet,
    Next time,
    Be more resistant,
    I love a good chase.

    im so sorry you had to go through this. i hope that guy gets what he deserves. the last two lines were beautiful btw. i wish people like this didnt exist, don't you?

    anyway, good job!

  • shyprincessT
    March 10, 2008

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    i am truly sorry

    remeber to be stong and that it not sure fult it was only to have control over u and dont let him i know how u feel more than anyone i was raped bye he one i trust and love he was not only a ex boyfriend but he was my best friend and he was like a brother to me


  • Number 13
    November 16, 2007

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    "I feel so sick,
    I feel so used,
    I feel so dirty,
    I want to rip my skin,
    And start over new.
    And my reason is you."

    I know how that is,
    I feel ashamed of myself simply because of what's happened to me, I use to literally argue with people over whether I was pretty or not.. After hosting this contest I've realized not of it was my fault, and i dug deep into those wounds, possibly too deep, I could hardly sleep for 2 days, all I felt was their hands on me, all i could hear was their voices, but I got past it and since then I've been doing well.

    I hope that some day the hurting stops for you, I can't say it's stopped for me but it's healing, i'm healing and I'm actually happy with myself, for once.

    I wish you the best, I'm here if you ever want to talk <3


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 10, 2007

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    once again really good, i highlighed the following* beacuse i beileve it to be a graet example of how people would feel after rape, i liked the first verse, i think this piece would work more if you repeated the first verse it would give it more impact, but that said
    the emotion in this piece wins me over again, great write

    *I'm sickened by my own body,

    I just want to rip my skin off,

    And start over new.




  • angelsslayer
    August 7, 2007
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    The wording you used was very strong. The flow was fab also.


  • Manoj Sanyal
    August 7, 2007
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    very sad indeed ...with emotions
    good luck

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