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[ The Sea ]

The Sea
  rises and falls, each swell
      brings it closer to the shore
It reaches white-tipped fingers toward
  the ever-present
      (but just out-of-reach)
        goal.
To be dry,
  to bask in the glory of
      sun-baked sobriety.
        Drug free is the way to be.
            (Or so I hear)
And still The Sea reaches,
  foaming fingers
      despite the moon's gravity and
        the changing of the tide.

Author notes

17 July 2007.
This one just came to me while I was attending an open-mic poetry slam. I'm really pleased with it as a rough draft, and I feel that it only needs a teeny bit of work.

Where does the metaphor feel forced?

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