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Take A Closer Look

Just one look at me,
You wouldn't think a thing,
But if you got to know my story,
Nothing would be the same.

He stripped me from my pride,
From my sanity,
As he pushed me down,
And took my virginity.

 

I began to cry,
And try to fight back,
But he was to strong for me,
And hit me to make me stop.

 

When he got done,

I felt like a rag,

I had been used by someone else.

 

I feel so disgusted,
Every time I look into a mirror.

I just want to cry,

But I hold in my tears.

 

When I look at you,

Images flashes back,

My stomach turns,

Dark images,

That will never leave me.

 

Look at me now,

Do you look at me the same?

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  • shyprincessT
    March 10, 2008

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    sorry that u had to go though it but know that ur not the only one ur not alone i went though something simler


  • forever dreaming
    October 4, 2007

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    This is a very strong piece of poetry on a subject that I cannot relate to but at the same time that does not take away from its strength for I found myself wanting to reach out and comfort you. That person may have not seen your worth but you are a better person than they will ever be. And it shows in this poem. Well done on penning such a difficult subject matter and the best of luck to you xxx


  • God is my reality
    September 23, 2007

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    Wow, this is so sad. I love how much emotion is in this. Excellent job. You did an amazing job, and this really will open a lot of peoples eyes


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    September 9, 2007

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    WoW
    This is so sad,
    I hurt insode whae I read these kinds of poetry.
    There are so many sick people out that just make me sick.
    Sometimes I don't understand why people do things to hurt others.
    I myself can relate to this very touching piece, for I have been there also.
    I am glad you wrote about this. I hope it makes you feel better by doing so.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

  • ms. kitty kat
    September 9, 2007

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    This is one powerful piece. I can relate to this poem more than anyone ever realizes. I felt so many emotions flooding back as I was reading this. the lines that really reached out to me were:

    When he got done,

    I felt like a rag,

    I had been used by someone else.

    and:


    Look at me now,

    Do you look at me the same?

    I hope you didn't experience this, but if you did and you need to talk, I will be there and I will listen.







  • ModernXTimes
    September 9, 2007

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    It's so...what's a good word to describe this...raw. The poem is so raw. It's pure emotion. In every single word lies some of the sadness that you felt (? I hope to god you never felt something like this. If you have, my sympathy goes out to you, and my hatred goes out to whoever did this to you)
    Keep on writing!


  • edit my world.
    September 9, 2007

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    1) thank you so much for entering ur AP name like asked.

    This was a sad piece but i still loved it. It made me want to cry, i really hope this hasnt happened to you...If it did i send out my heart to you. What a strong piece thankies for entering!
    ~dani


  • Immortal Shadow
    August 13, 2007
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    Very nice I really liked it!


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 10, 2007

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    this has the same feel as the others ihave read full of emotion writing really well, i love this, ill leave you to realise why, great job my friend, keep it up,


    When he got done,

    I felt like a rag,

    I had been used by someone else.

    best of luck in this contest for raw emotion, this is gold in my humble opinion


  • WhatsErName
    August 10, 2007

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    THANK YOU! You are the FIRST person to put their name in the author notes before I told you! That will earn some ponits with me. It is a great piece, it shows a lot of emotion. Btu I cannot say more until the winner is picked, so bye for now!


    • Ignis Corpus
      August 10, 2007
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      i always try to follow the rules as i remember them and thanks, im glad you enjoyed this


  • kevoc
    August 7, 2007

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    Good

    No rhyme scheme is needed in this piece. It's great as is. Once again capturing such emotion with so simple of words. Good write


  • angelsslayer
    August 7, 2007

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    I love the way you wrote it.
    " Look at me now,
    Do you look at me the same?" The ending was great.

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