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A Gordian Knot

a gross of reasons
I give myself to stay

internal diatribe
an infinite loop
of a multiplicity of sins

against me
against the world
against yourself

what is it
that keeps me here

why do I seek to unweave this knot
when like Alexander, I should slice


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Nam
    June 1
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    A good poem that you have written here.

    -Nam

  • Cat gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    i too like the title and its use weaved through out the piece- i like it so much as title i would probably , if this were my piece eliminate the word gordian in the piece- i think you lessen the impact a bit when it is brought home like that-

    a very nice piece- glad to see it in the contest
    m

  • AJ Morelli gold member
    August 11, 2007

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    i like the gordian knot as metaphor, works very well here... when i trained as a fireman (very long ago) i had to take a class in knots, so with that experience in mind i'd probably go for the knife too...lol

    this is a really nice piece...


    al

  • Tennessee-Joe silver member
    August 11, 2007

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    Im thinking on this. To stay-to leave. I don't have the answer. All I know is that this is good poerty.
    Joe


  • ariosto gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    Probably
    A lot cann sneak up on you while you concentrate on unweaving, when a swift cut with a sharp knife will
    do the job. Of course that won't take care of PKRS
    (Post Knot Removal Syndrome)
    How are you NC?


  • champrins
    August 8, 2007
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    Really well said....and written girl


  • liltandrhyme silver member
    August 8, 2007

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    A well written piece, with the strong metaphor of the title powering it throughout ( I was familiar with the phrase, but Googled it anyway, just to check! ).

    This will find an echo in many hearts who find themselves mentally or physically trapped in a situation or a life where it is easier to fumble with the cord than reach for the sword...

    Best of luck in the contest!
    PJ


  • Amera gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    Well done! A unique thought. Perhaps you should step out of the box and give it a shot.

    Love,
    Amera ♥


  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    Nicely done. Very unique
    Good luck in the contest

    delila


  • ellipsist
    August 7, 2007
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    nicely penned... my friend

    a clever take on the prompt, indeed... very powerful ending...


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    It would be a fatal flaw...don't do it You write with impact...always leaving my mind lingering within your words. Sorry I've been so dang busy and haven't been reading, it has surely been missed ~tia

  • Arzab
    August 6, 2007

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    Powerful write. Seemed very metaphorical. Like trying to figure out something in life, but maybe wondering if it's worth trying to figure something out because maybe a person is afraid of what they might find out. Good luck in the contest.


  • aliceramone silver member
    August 6, 2007
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    again a great write...interesting with good use of metaphors...well done Deb

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