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start of settling

I want to broadcast my ever anxious heart; let it run itself out of energy. I wake up to the sound of everything that ever mattered, but I can't be nervous now. There's better ways to live. I can't be worried now; I'm in for it.  I'm yours, an ever anxious heart. The start of something settling.





































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  • Phineas Red
    August 12, 2007
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    ghl;iasdfgk;bujasdg;ilbasdg.
    in the kindest possible way,

    i hate you.


  • Tangled Angle
    August 12, 2007

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    Awwwwwwwwww.

    *regains composure*
    *ahem*

    yeah, great poem. I like it!


  • grass
    August 9, 2007
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    yep.

    you definatly managed to sum up how I feel about a boy at this point in time.


  • CarCrashHumor
    August 8, 2007

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    am I right in thinking
    you may have an object of your affection? as in a person..?


    this line is great "I wake up to the sound of everything that ever mattered,"

    "ever" is probably my favorite word in poetry. it's powerful.

    one thing though is this " that's added you and i."
    I agree it sounds better that way, but since it's a DO (i think)
    it should be "the list that's added you and me."

    beautiful writing as always.


  • lysdarling
    August 7, 2007

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    the beginning is always the best part. that feeling you get is undescribable but you did it justice. this is very good.


  • Cherokee
    August 7, 2007

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    This has the urgency and emotion of adolescence. I hope you don't mind me saying so. I think people in their teens and twenties really are experts at forcing the reader to feel. But that's just me. After that, we tend to be a little more apathetic. Hope I don't get letters.

    • marrow
      August 7, 2007
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      thank you very much. i'd not at all be offended by that.


  • Saint Gut-Free
    August 7, 2007

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    I've missed reading your stuff, man. I need my internet back. This is so beautiful; it's like a sunrise in words, only less cliché and a little more manly. This captures the feeling of first noticing and falling for someone perfectly in a way that's original and fresh and touching.


  • The Burning Year
    August 6, 2007

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    "I wake up to the sound of everything that ever mattered, the list that's added you and i."

    oh my god...yea...thats great


  • The.Stars.Go.Blue
    August 6, 2007
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    Sounds like a love plea to me.
    I think someone's been hit by a little guy named...
    CUPID!

    • marrow
      August 6, 2007
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      lol partially, yeah.
      but it's also a forced poem, too. so take your pick.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 6, 2007
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    You're on a roll...

    and perhaps in love?

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