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I regret my words to you, the way in which I said them. It was a shame to have to open up like this; necessity and force. I do not love myself this way, nor could I sway you in my heart, unriled by the thoughts you see. I find my body troubled, this feeling equating to what's been in my mouth, and what is out and open now. Maybe it's my fault, I feel you bring it on. This intrusion, will it end? I'm not one to flinch, but I'm swaying in the way you ask my every word to bend. I'm over you, leaving it face down. It's over now, I'm heading out. To help myself get over you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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in my head. it's all that matters, if it's okay there.

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  • vertigo beat
    October 8, 2007
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    Liked it, but not as much as I like your others.


  • Dollbaby4ever
    August 16, 2007
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    wow

    i LOVE it!!! you are an extrordinary writer!!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 14, 2007

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    Wow, this is a very potent piece of poetry here you weave, thanks for sharing here, all the best in your future writes, this was awesome..pen on poet.


    Timothy aka poeticweaver


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 10, 2007
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    wow those words spoke volumn enen though they were small and in a poise form


  • CarCrashHumor
    August 8, 2007

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    " I'm over you, leaving it face down. It's over now, I'm heading out. To help myself get over you."

    the title is perfect for this piece


  • poetryality silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    I am a lover of prose, and find that I do not write it often enough. It is refreshing to find it written here at AP, and in this challenge. You have done exceedingly well with this and I am not in the least surprised. Excellent take on the prompt Justin, and such wonderful prose.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Cat gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    i like when poets step outside their own boxes or my preconceived notion of poetry and do something, create something different- i am not sure this is the strongest representation of your immense talent but it was unique and i am very happy to find it here

    m


  • Rowan gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    I like the prose form, as well..food for thought.
    well done.


  • Malabu
    August 7, 2007

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    Relationships

    I believe most of society think men are the cause of most relations to faulter...yes we are bruts..and the delicate women is so innocent...we are the blame no matter what...a man is no man unless he walks away..yet non seem to understand...what has driven us to a point of no return...Always we should say I'm sorry...cause we are...no matter what the ending be...

    these be thoughts I pondered reading yours...


  • layla.
    August 7, 2007
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    nice j... very much in the open. Good luck.

  • Oya Ayaba Nikua
    August 7, 2007
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    excellent...I like the prose block


  • Mr E
    August 6, 2007

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    In your head, but now in ours. Not your poetic zenith (though I'm sure that was hardly your intention), but it's always a treat to see your way with words/thoughts. Refreshing.


  • hilly
    August 6, 2007

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    You know, I was listening to this song. And it made me think of you. And I wanted to read something of yours. So I actually came to this site and signed in and all that just to come read something of yours, and lucky me, you've written something new. You have become a craving. I think that says a lot. This is not my favorite of yours, but I'm quenched.

    • marrow
      August 6, 2007
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      wow, thank you very much. i really appreciate that comment. i'm adding a few others. thank you very much.


  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 6, 2007
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    Justin, please excuse my lack of comment but...

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