another tumble,
tawdry lace
of St Audry
tight around my throat
A defect of character
nature or nurture,
the question
the quest
to rise from a living grave
like some lesser version
of the phoenix
from familiar,
(emphasis on etymology)
ground
A contest entry
- face down by Cat.
500 points, ended August 7, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Guaranteed Comments! II by Nam.
1750 points, ended June 8, 122 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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" (emphasis on etymology)"
Didn't feel that this was necessary. Other than that, a great poem here.
-Nam
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Thanks
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I had to come and see about this. Unfortunately, I won't budge on the no prewrite rule, but I have a feeling this relates more to tabula rasa than anything i'll get in my contest. i really like the last three lines.
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OH, no prob...I wasn't even going to ask...It's just that it's not a very common term...I was surprised to see it, lol
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4 Stars ####
I keep thinking-wow that's good. Keep posting, I need to think more.
Joe
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the gold speaks for itself you are an awesome writer and this poem her shows it to all
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Well done! I see why this won gold. Leads to the old saying that there are no atheists in fox holes.
Love,
Amera ♥
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an amazing write, congratulations on this excellent poetry!
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Luna,
Congratulations on the Gold, well deserved!!
PJ -
I love the parenthesized wording. LOL This is a poignant work of word-play. A well deserved trophy is yours my dear. CONGRATULATIONS! An exquisite take on the prompt!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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your first stanza is genius
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Nice take on the contest theme, Luna.
When you're face down in the gutter, there is only one way to go. The answer to the 'nature or nurture' dichotomy may determine the possibility of a clean slate.
Very nicely written, great title, loved the 'tawdry lace of St. Audry', the 'living grave' and the Pheonix analogy.
Best of luck in the contest.
PJ
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a really fine write-
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Nicely formed words here great take on the contest prompt
Well done
delila
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nicely done...
great take on the prompt... words seem very carefully chosen... beautiful job... 
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a fine write, really liked this one.
Not too wordy, but with lots of impact.
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Gee Girl
can't say Im not impressed... I am! we are who we are...we can change our formal attire and reinvent ourselves...environment will mold us and shape our physical stature...still we cannot change our spirit being an aura...Im just wiered...super write
Mal
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Nice one NC
Spooky
good luck with it
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Rising from the living grave, what a vision and one of the reasons I love to read your work! It just comes to life...and breathes on it's own.
~Tia
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interseting write that is carefully penned...i loved it
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the true Phoenix nurtures defects of character, as its the imperfections of life which lead to the enjoyments of the perfections of the heart, and rebirth of the soul.
And I do suspect you would wear lace...delicately
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Powerful write. I liked the question of nature or nurture. I personally think our environment has more of an effect on us than who our family is. Anyway, great write. Good luck in the contest.
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