Softly,
whispering winds
gently caress my face.
Tender their touch I feel your lips,
taste your sweetness, tongues dancing together.
Slowly I melt into your arms,
as I hear the sound of
winds whispering,
softly.
Joyce Le Lievre
(sunny day)
© Joyce A. Le Lievre, All rights reserved
August 6, 2007
Author notes
This is also an entry for my group, The Titles Challenge Group.
Rictameter
A rictameter is a poem containing 9 lines in which the first and last line must be the same. The syllable count by line is as follows; 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2. They are a great way to express your feelings about someone or something.
The picture is courtesy of the contest.
In a list
A contest entry
- Form Contest - Rictameter by Seeking Peace.
750 points, ended August 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is beautiful, this is how we all long for love to be, such tenderness drips from the words you have penned, well done
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
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Karen, Thank you for the lovely words of praise and for hosting such a wonderful contest. It was a joy to be a part of this one. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for the best wishes also. Love and God bless, Joyce
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Lovely, soft alliteration in this piece adds to the feeling of tenderness and body language. I like the golden backdrop, too and the heart formed in the couple's shadow. It's nice to think that such intimacy begins and ends the same way. Karen
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Karen, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise. Rictameters are one of my more favorite forms to write. I did change the background to one I just created though. Yes as the rictameter begins and ends the same so does intimacy. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this piece. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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beautiful in form, language and imagery...
Wonderful take on the picture...
TY for entering!
Lynda
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Lynda, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise. I would also like to thank you for hosting such a wonderful contest. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this. Love and God bless, Joyce
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OOh this was very soft and very wonderful,
I have tried many times to do this form, but my spirit of free flow always seems to hold me trapped, yet you make it seem so easy and do it with a breath taking way.
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Shey, The rictameter is a free flowing piece and I think if you put your mind to it the syllable restrictions wouldn't hold you back. Not with your talent. Thank you for such lovely words of praise and I'm very happy that you enjoyed this one so much. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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Ew...lala...I think I'm blushing after reading this lovely rictameter-no doubt it will leave some hot and bothered, lol. Best wishes in your contest!!!!
I don't read many poems these days, but if they are short I try to take them in-glad I caught this one. Hope all is well with you!!!
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Hello Vickie, You should have been thinking of Mel when you read it and then you wouldn't have blushed. LOL
Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words for me. Your nursing school studies must be keeping you very busy. I was so happy to see your words here, you gave me such a big smile. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this and I thank you for the best wishes also. I haven't stopped by your page in a while. I will be by shortly. Just listening to those whispering winds right now. 
I miss you and your wonderful sense of humor. Yes, things are well and I hope the same for you. Love you my friend, Joyce
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I am there. Dreamy wistful alive. Oh how beautiful. ~Pamela
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Pam, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise to me as always. I wish I could have upped the rating on this one. I do love rictameters and this title was just calling out for one. I'm very happy that you enjoyed it so much. Love you my friend, Joyce
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sis,this is beautifully written sensual to the last whisper, good luck in the contest,love and many blessings PM
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Sis, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise. This group title seemed to call out for a rictameter and I just went with it. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this one. Love you always sis, Joyce
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I love the Rictameter and no one can do the form justice like you can. This is beautiful and so sensuious. I just read an eritic poem from you and now this. You must be a woman with a very large smile on your face.
Love,
Amera ♥
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Amera, Thank you for the applauses and such lovely words of praise. The smile just keeps getting bigger. LOL
I love rictameters as they say so much in so few words. Your praise is always so inspiring. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this one. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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