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Back to where it all began

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This thought of incarnation made me pause,

To Analyse the world in which we live,

Now would I choose a creature, hoof or claws?

Deep study to this question I must give.

For mortal man is avid in his ways,

And covets everything within his sight;

The thought of being hunted all my days,

Would make the bravest heart soon take to flight.

So I will be a creature of the deep

Where no submersible can ever reach,

And in this peaceful world my vigil keep,

Till mortal man no longer is a leech.

When man destroys each thing that nature planned,

Can life begin again is my demand?

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  • Ellis gold member
    December 9, 2007
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    Flawless Writing

    Being a cat does have its advantages.

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  • suseann
    August 7, 2007

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    Well this took considerable thought. And I agree with the host.Very profound indeed.Also grand in verse.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    August 7, 2007
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    Thank you for your beautiful and profound entry, Josephine

  • Bad Bill
    August 7, 2007
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    I love this sonnet--great content and beautifully worded. You've risen to the contest's challenge magnificently. My only quibble would be the line "Would make the bravest heart take to fleet flight". To my mind, this reads a little awkwardly and interferes with the rhythm of the surrounding lines. Apart from that, perfect!

    Bill


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 6, 2007
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    A very unique reply to the contest question - how you take this and return back to the beginning, as you think that is where man is heading as he destroys his fellow men and his environment. Great rhythm, rhyme flow and message you share in these lines.


  • capricornpoet
    August 6, 2007

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    philosophy of man's self destruct

    Under the sea are mermaids, perhaps be a mermaid and
    sink ships with greedy men... under the murks are
    creatures yet to see, perhaps worst than man...


    • masterblaster gold member
      August 6, 2007
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      Hi, well creatures do not calculate to harm each other, yes they hunt to eat but man hurts his fellow man, calculates, is avid, he knows the difference between right and wrong where a creature does not, but we are all entitled to our opinion, I would rather face a barracuda than some people I know, many thanks for reading,Di

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