Forbidden memories
Etched, carved deep within
my soul
Forgotten secrets
Buried in a
safe haven
Mind wanders aimlessly
locked forever in
time
Sanity is on the
brink of hell
Sinking further into
the abyss
Watching from the
inside
out
Author notes
option 1 turn bronze into Silver or Gold
POD
Please do not mention my name in your comments thanks
This is how I feel on the inside all the time. Memories locked so deep inside that I cannot even remember them.. My mind is always protecting me from the past.
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A contest entry
- The POD ~* ~* by Arkbear.
300 points, ended August 6, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - bronze II by Salty Hibiscus.
525 points, ended June 11, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful!! short and powerful. thanks for sharing.
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This is an amazing piece my favorite lines are :
Sanity is on the brink of hell
Sinking further into
the abyss Watching from the inside out
Congrats on the bronze
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Thanks I just wrote it from how I feel in life today. You know the feelings that I portrayed. Thanks as always for your kind and caring comments. They really mean so much too me
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this captures the feelings very well. I see you captured a bronze with it, congratulations. I never award a trophy to someone who has already entered in other contests but I neglected to put it in the rules...
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I am sorry when I entered there was no rules up for this. I removed it sorry to take up a contest place
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This has wonderful flow and a very solemn, deep sense of emotion. I am very sorry that you feel this way all the time. Great write, however.
Thank you for entering and best luck in the contest. -
Ap is soooo bad right now.......
.....Theresa...please have patience with me,
as AP is acting up BIG time ~
...also...my New Judges and I are discussing new
details about this Sequence of Contests ~
All I am going to say....and I better hurry
before AP kicks me off again....is
that this is a very good entry ~
Loved the depth....loved your flow & presentation ~
Gramatical choices and spelling....simple on the choices,
yet strong in affect ~
Sit & Ponder affect........not bad....but not terrific ~
Ability to follow Rules...Superb ~
Very nice job Hun ~
Score: 93
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Sanity is on the brink of hell Sinking further into the abyss...I didn't know you knew how I felt
This is wonderful my sweet friend and good luck on the contest
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Thanks it is just what came to mind when I was sitting here pondering on what to write for this contest. Plus as always my emotions played a very big part. I am sorry that you have to endure this pain too. No one should. Thanks again and bless you
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i like your poem, it's sad, and i hope that by writting this you let a weight go.
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