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Abortion

Yet to be born, a tiny soul
Blessing bestowed from God above
Ripped apart and out of control
Cold metal tools and surgeon’s glove

Blessing bestowed from God above
It's more than my mind can consume
Sent to this world, a perfect love
Nestled within a mother’s womb

Ripped apart and out of control
An abomination to man kind
Human life that society stole
How could anyone be so blind

Cold metal tools and surgeon’s glove
Can’t we stop what abortion stole?
Damn politicians need a shove
This poet’s pen is out of control

 

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  • Peripatetic gold member
    April 24

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    The contrasts between images of the tissue of life and the and lifeless instruments for separating life from its temporal tissue are stark, turning a bright light on to an issue too often obfuscated by a cloud of words and secondary and tertiary concerns.
    Life and lives of others are often inconvenient and messy. Our society has determined the most innocent of lives should be the least defended by our laws and ultimately by our sense of humanity.


  • SignifyingNothing
    April 20
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    I already commented on this, so I'll just say thanks for entering, still a powerful piece.


  • Legend silver member
    April 7

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    We meet again yet again you penned something special (Do you ever do anything other?) Excellent as usually Good luck in the contest


  • echo-ink
    July 12, 2008

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    God Bless You, Amera, YAY I totally agree , abortion is a horror story come to life

    And the tiny innocent victim's need voices like you to tell the truth, that this is such a horrendous thing that society allows to happen, in a supposedly intelligent and caring society, they will all answer for it. This was fantastic, I adore this poem, and I love you for your opinion and love and medical care of our tiniest people. much, much love, Dora7. HURRAH FOR AMERA!!!


  • TwiztidMaggot
    May 22, 2008

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    this is a wonderful write! Congradulations on your honorable mention. Keep up your amazing work! You really spoke the truth in this peice!

    CrimsonViper


  • simplefarmgirl
    February 6, 2008
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    I completely agree with you. Thank you for having the strength to write this.


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    January 1, 2008

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    Very powerful, it left me speechless. I agrees very strongly with you, abortions are indeed wrong, abortions are just as bad as murder. Good job, keep writing.


  • Faeryn
    December 30, 2007
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    powerful. and amazing. I don't have words to describe how good this is.


  • TwilightsWhisper
    December 1, 2007

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    .


  • SignifyingNothing
    November 18, 2007

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    I love retournes, and this is a great one. I am not so sure about the last line- does it refer to censorship? It kind of weakens the poem for me.

    If anyone out there is interested in abortion, they should check out http://www.clinicquotes.com which has all kinds of information including quotes from abortion providers who talk about what they do. It's quite an eye-opener.

    This was very well done. Thanks for entering!


  • Wind Walker
    September 18, 2007

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    My Dearest Daughter

    I can agree with your writing as far as it goes
    but would take it one step further where as it should be so too the same punishment to parents who abuse the children they drag into this world.
    "All life is sacred, respect all life " one of the 10 Commandments of the First Peoples of the Americans
    Poppi


  • phsycoawesomeness
    August 14, 2007

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    i am officially glad to see that there are people in the world with some kind of common sense

    thank you for this beautiful poem


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    August 13, 2007

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    Awesome

    I not only agree with you I will take it further. I believe abortion to be murder and not only that it is 1st degree premeditated murder and the doctors who do it are the assasins.

    Children are a precious gift of God and for the things you describe here to be done to them is horrible.

    I wrote about this also in :
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/1103123

    God bless you, Mark


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 11, 2007

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    Well done with the vivid description here of such a controversial issue and I know what a splendid baby doc you are ...and to hell with those who tell you cannot express what you want.....Love you tons!!!!


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    August 11, 2007
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    the title is so origional


  • autumns rising
    August 9, 2007

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    This an amazing poem that drips with truth. You should be allowed to voice your opinion no matter what. Abortion is wrong! That picture is making me cry


    • Amera gold member
      August 9, 2007
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      thanks so much, it makes me cry too


  • thelordreigns gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    This is such a tragedy and such a waste.

    Thank you for being bold and posting this.

    Thank you for dedicating your life to saving the little babies - the most defenseless of all humanity - those that need the most protections.

    Please look at a poem I recently wrote about the lost babies and the neglect of humanity.

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/3257160

    God bless you. - joanne

  • Bob Fox
    August 9, 2007

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    well Stated

    As i man I cannot really be a true judge of womens actions concerning abortion. I think there may be times when it may be necessary but I also feel that some just use it as a form of revenge or birth control. deep thoughts have been penned here. God bless


  • Kissafrog
    August 9, 2007

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    I share your opinion...and i believe that abortion is just as bad as murder.

    This poem is nicely written. I know that the picture adds more emotion to the idea that adortion is wrong but I dont think that you needed the picture because the poem showed enough emotion to do the same thing that the picture did.

    I really liked how you repeated some of the lines, it really added more meaning to your poem.

    Awesome work!


  • TwilightsWhisper
    August 9, 2007
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    woah! love this write. couldn't have said it better myself. ....i agree with u....if people are going to abort their child then why are they having sex...?


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    August 9, 2007
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    You have every right to voice your opinion, I feel just as strongly on this issue, this is an amazing poem and you are an amazing poet Amera.
    I'll tell you a little story my brother in law is a gynecologist and there are people who want to abort their unborn child because of the sex. He gets so mad because he loves children more than anything and cannot believe their attitudes because he has so many clients who cannot conceive and who would kiss his feet just to be able to.
    I don't understand why people are so angry and it's stupidity because abuse is in adult anyway because only adults can read abuse.
    It amazes me how this place is meant to be about voicing opinions freely without judgment yet all people do is bitch and screw.
    It's YOUR piece not theirs they know very well they were clicking on abuse.
    Keep your head up high and write your truths. It's your opinion and it's your poem. People can take a hike and mind their own business. If you don't like it don't read it I'm sure you can tell as soon as you open it what it's about if you have common sense that is.
    Lil


    • Amera gold member
      August 9, 2007
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      thanks so much, it's support from people like you that makes it all worthwhile


      • Moons Lunar Angel
        August 16, 2007

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        You're welcome honey. I feel just as strongly on this issue, I may not agree with you 100%, but it doesn't mean I can't look at your opinion. It's always good to see peoples opinions whether they're different, the same, biased or whatever. It's how the world goes round. I'm not going to be arrogant and tell people they can't write things cos I don't like it. If you were forcing your opinion on everyone I would disagree but you aren't you're just writing YOUR view. You never said everyone has to agree. GOODLUCK HONEY!

  • quakietree
    August 9, 2007

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    Powerful . . .

    This is a great poem- I enjoyed your use of the form "retourne" and your explaination. This has good rhythm and flow and rhyme. It is well written.
    As far as your right to write it:
    Why would that be in question?
    I thought the picture was shocking and repulsive and the poem was graphic but totally appropriate. Why shouldn't people see it? Do we think that if people see this picture it may deter them from aborting a baby? I think statistics would disprove that. And isn't this part of "informed consent"? Shouldn't people have all the information
    before they have this medical procedure?

    Again, great poem- very powerful-

    qt



  • duana
    August 9, 2007

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    AMEN! This is MORE than your 'personal' belief- I just hope you realize this. Abortion really is murder, and until pro lifers truly understand this, not just have a belief about it, no one is going to take them seriously. This is great! Good for you!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    This issue ping-pongs in my mind. I might not have exactly your same thoughts on this. But don't you listen to them. This is a beautiful expression of what you believe.

    I stand with you.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    Damn politicians need a shove
    This poet’s pen is out of control

    just stunning and great verse is here..





  • buttheadsloon
    August 8, 2007

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    Thank you for this statement on behalf of the children being sacrificed.

    "Blessing bestowed from God above
    It's more than a mind can consume
    Sent to this world, a perfect love
    Nestled within a mother’s womb"

    Says it all!

    A friend and her sister both expecting when the sister learned early her's suffered Down's and she contemplated abortion - after her expectant sister offered to adopt it, her sister decided to keep her child. The friend then delivered her baby ... to learn it also had Down's!! They now consider themselves blessed to share their challenges together.


    • Amera gold member
      August 8, 2007
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      Thank you, it's support from people like you that make this world a better place.



      Love,
      Amera ♥

  • shoutuntoGod
    August 8, 2007

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    amazing

    this is probably one of the best poems i have read on here. you are completely amazing for writing this. my best friend and her sister were almost aborted. i know for a fact that there mother has gotten a couple of abortions. she regrets it every single day of her life. on top of that it is murder. there is no way to justify killing an innocent baby that didnt to anything to deserve death. i'm on your side for this poem 100%. and as for all of you out there who are dissagreeing with what i say in this comment or what she is saying in this poem you can say it to me because i'm not afraid of you and what you have to say.


  • ambiechick
    August 8, 2007

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    right on!!

    amen.
    there was a possibility that i could have been aborted. i thank God that i wasn't.
    way to tell the world.


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    August 8, 2007
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    This poem was very well written. you do have the right to write whatever you want. Ive gotten into trouble because of what Ive written too. Also I agree with you 100% about what your saying in this piece. It is wrong...again great job!

    -Steve-


  • Griswold silver member
    August 7, 2007

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    Very well done hon. I agree with your right to write whatever you like. Keep it up. I'm behind you 100%...Scott


  • Myjoy gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    Wonderful read, you are a wonderful person for giving these little people a voice and to know they too have a right to live. How can we play God? Well done, well said.


  • Never Fall in Love
    August 7, 2007

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    I've heard a lot about this poem and decided to check it out.
    I don't, seriously don't understand why people can't keep their mouths shut when it comes to opinions! Everyone has a different opinion and when someone has something different - they can't accept it.
    What am I ranting about? They need the brains to accept.

    I'll tell you, this is the most brilliant and truest poem I've ever read. And all those idiots who want to talk about it - let them, they're just jealous that they can't write something half as good.

    NeveR ♥


  • Mansoor
    August 7, 2007

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    This is undoubtedly an amazing and beautiful write. And i wondr why some one wud tell this is offensive. its not at all, u have ur opinion and right to say. This poem is extremely well and has amazng attraction towards it. I love it, its brilliant. The style u have like repeating the same lines in the next stanzas and then the last thing thingy, its cool. The thought is beautiful and its so true.
    babies are newborn and free from all sins and they ought to live and breathe for its not their mistake. Its so sad that women get abortion widout understanding they're killing a life which is there to be! I love your idea and the title clearly implies everythng abt it. One more thing i wud like to comment on, that the rhyming is excellent. and surgeon's tool gave me a shudder LoL! its excellent

    Love,
    Mansoor


  • Marctheman
    August 7, 2007

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    i love this, you know what because not everyone has the courage to put something so different out there for people to read, this poem from the begining have my eyes, now when ever i will hear the word abortion, guess what your poem will come to mind.

    thank you for open my eyes more.


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    Amera - it's not always popular
    to stand up for what you believe
    in. I'm standing beside you...

    Lane

    • Amera gold member
      August 7, 2007
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      I take your hand and hold on tight. I knew you would.

  • tinytoes
    August 7, 2007

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    What a very moving and graphic poem Amera. You have written a very strong message here and though I know some people will find it offensive, I would question why they would read it in the first place when the title is a clear enough message as to the poem content! Very touching and thought provoking poem. Julie. xx

  • Eusebius
    August 7, 2007

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    Bravo

    A very potent piece of poetry, which, uhappily, falls upon either deaf or defiant ears. Of course they hate it, the blood is on their hands, and you have the audacity to remind us! Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!


  • aliceramone
    August 7, 2007

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    Bravo! ...thank you so much for this...I am mostly liberal in my opinions but this is one where I agree with the right...strange how if your liberal you must believe everything they do and if your conservative you must believe everything they believe-we are a nation of fanatics!...your poem is filled with truth and people just don't wanna look at the truth they would rather hide in the ignarance of convenience.
    a well penned piece with excellent form that(of course) grips the reader throughout...excellent


  • quantumsurveyor
    August 7, 2007

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    Would that the IMs you have gotten were exposed for all to see. I guess that by commenting privately these people keep themselves hidden away - wonder why? A powerful poem that cuts the heart - the surgeon's tools make me shudder. Thank you for the read.
    Donald


  • captain howdy
    August 6, 2007
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    *hugs* I think it is you who are the wonderful person for showing such strength and standing up for what you believe in. Cowards crumple under pressure, and my dear, you are no coward! Thanks for your kind words!!!

  • Mercury Rising
    August 6, 2007

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    You are a wonderful poet, this is a tremendous poem, and your are very courageous in expressing your beliefs regardless of the back-lash. Best of luck in the contest, and keep up the marvelous work.

    D.D.M.


  • blueyez
    August 6, 2007

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    speak on sister we're all allowd our opinion!!!!!

  • captain howdy
    August 6, 2007
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    In fact, I think I shall leave more applause.

    *applause times ten*


  • captain howdy
    August 6, 2007

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    I have read a couple of things on this site that I would consider a thousand times more offensive than what I have just read and can't imagine why anyone could have any reason to complain about this poem.

    The title says "Abortion" and you have it in a category not recommended to children. I don't know what it is that they expected to read after initially seeing the title, but you have every right to write your opinion and the truth, just as they have every right to not read it if they don't want to. I admire that you are standing up for your poem and your feelings.

    I thought this was a well-penned poem with a lot of emphasis on things that people try to conveniently forget about. The form was like a gentle reminder as it repeated the certain lines that painted the picture well. A very grim picture it is indeed and people are right to feel ashamed, but not to take it out on you. For you were simply the messenger.

    If people want to be blind to the truth, you just let them. Don't even worry about what they have to say to you if they can't treat your opinion with respect. Best of luck in the contest and I hope you win gold for your excellent poem. You deserve it for this powerful piece and all the grief you're getting (but mostly because of your talent) for writing what you feel.


    • Amera gold member
      August 6, 2007
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      Elisabeth

      This is the most sincere and supportive comment I have ever received for a poem. From the bottom of my heart I thank you, I think you are a wonderful person.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 6, 2007

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    You have every right to express this, I cannot abide abortion issues, for each child is innocent no matter what the issue in how they got to be born, they each have a right to live. Love, C

  • Lifes Lilies
    August 6, 2007

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    Everyone who gave you shit can shove it back up their arses. This piece is brilliant dear. You have a right to write whatever the bloody hell you feel like without getting BULLSHIT from other people. They have their own opinions too and I'm sure they wouldn't want you doing that to them. I hate people that don't respect other people's opinions. Just forget about them, they don't matter. If they're so close-minded then screw them.

    You bloody well have the right to post this without getting shit from people. Don't let them get to you. If they don't like the poem, they can state so in a more mature fashion or not say anything at all. People should learn some respect. 'Freedom of speech' anyone?

    Sorry about the rant on your piece. Speaking of which, it's an excellent piece. You've stated your opinion clearly and powerfully. It's brilliant. I wish you all the luck in this contest.


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    I commend your piece! Everyone has a right to pen their beliefs, that is what our country fights for everyday, "Freedom". I may or may not agree with your piece...but I can say from my heart I respect your opinion and you have the freedom and right to express it. If I could give you more than three clappies...I would unfortunately I can only give three, One for courage, one for, strength and one for expressions freedom ~Tia


  • Swan song gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Like always your poetry is excellent and now you have taken a step above. You have backbone. If you want to be a great writer you have to do exactly what you have done here. This is a subject that divides people.
    The dilemma is do women have the right to do as they wish with their bodies, or does the child have the right to life. Many argue that life is conceived only when it leaves the womb. The Idiots running our country play this to get votes but they will never solve it. From a religious stand point I tend to agree
    that abortion is wrong, but I think the Good Lord gave us the ability to abort for medical reasons. For example if the child will be a lump of mush or stillborn. Or the life of the mother is in severe peril. In cases of severe incest or even rape that the mother is not capable of handling. I do not believe that abortion should be allowed as a form of birth control. This has always been my stance and always will be. In my humble opinion every one is a little right and a little wrong, except the ones who want to plunge a child out because they were messing around and did not take percussions.
    You are well on your way to being a great writer Young lady.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    YOU HAVE EVERY RIGHT TO WRITE WHAT YOU FEEL. IS IN YOUR HEART AND WHAT YOU BELIEVE IN. AS A DOCTOR IM SURE YOU SEE YOUR SHARE OF BABIES THEY ARE STILL ABLE TO BE ABORTED IN AMERICA. LIFE IS A GIFT THAT SHOULD NOT BE JUST THROWN AWAY I SWEAR THERE NEEDS TO BE TOUGHER LAWS OR SOMETHING TO PROTECT UNBORN BABIES THEY ARE PATIENTS TO. ARGH


  • sunny day
    August 6, 2007

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    You most certainly do have the right to voice your opionion. This is America and last time I checked we still had the Freedom of Speech. This is one very powerful piece that you have penned for all of us to sink our teeth into and our hearts. My husband and I chose to remain childless by choice and that was our right. I will not down you for what you speak, in fact I say kudos to you for this. I am pro-choice and that is only to a point. I just get so frustrated by the women out there who bring unwanted children into this world to increase a welfare check so that they can supply their habits. Another thing is victims of rape, they should not be forced to carry and bring a child into the world that they did not want. I would never condone anyone aborting after choosing to have a child and finding out that the child will have a defect or something of that nature. This is a touchy subject and I'm most definitely stepping on some toes with my words right now. This is a sad and excellent write. Golden in my eyes. Best wishes in the contest. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    The Hell with them, this is the truth and for those that feel that it has to be done any other way, just do not see what that small life could have been, and what it should have been. They do not see pass their little bubbles and therefore are not really worth your trouble to worry about them.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 6, 2007
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    I’ve already received a dozen IM’s giving me shit about it. And No! I’m not putting it in the “adult” category, it’s in “abuse” and that category is screened from children too. I’m not insensitive, I understand medical needs


    Amera, its not the children they are concernened about, its the adults, who wish to not to be reminded of truth.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Murder is murder, regardless of the age, regardless of whether these children have anyone to speak for them. The number of abortions preformed on children who could have survived is in the many millions in this country alone, not to mention Europe. We loath Stalin, Hitler, Mao and other brutal killers of history, but they pale before what has been done the last 30-40 years. But then it is only a matter of 'convenience' isn't it? You have anyone who wishes to give you grief on this write, send them my way okay?




    Dad


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    August 6, 2007

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    My Heart cries and my soul bleeds for your words of pain and such need for people to open up and see...this is a life no matter how small, it is still life....One room abortions are performed and in the next a life is  being fought for, who has the right to decide...OMG...My Little BLUE Star I am busting with pride for you and your precious heart, may God bless you in all that you do


  • PoetsAngel
    August 6, 2007

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    WOW Honey! I can see why you would be getting nasty im's... But not from me I only give you love, encouragement, respect and admiration that you stand by your convictions so openly. I personally have never been able to decide which side of the fence to sit on, so for now I will continue to sit half way between freedom of choice and pro-life. A wonderfully penned piece which definitely makes the reader think.


    Cathy
    ♥♥♥♥♥


  • RedAquarius
    August 6, 2007

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    I am not surprised you've gotten IMs razing you. Abortion is a very touchy subject for people. However, those people need to remember freedom of speech - the title is pretty clear - should be a major hint, along with the category on your views - if they disagree - they shouldn't click it.

    As for the poem itself, I think it's written well and is very striking, especially in this form with the repetitions. Personally, I am pro-choice having been a "scenario" at one point. I do not regret my choice then or now. There is a difference though, from women who use it like casual birth control and women like me (and many others).

    Kudos for your strong belief and bravery in voicing your view, despite the harassment you knew you'd get from doing so.


  • HaleyMary
    August 6, 2007

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    Dark poem, but good write. It is sad when we see a young life taken before it's given a chance to live, but sometimes I think it depends on the situation of the abortion. I'll support it if a girl has been raped and her body's not mature enough to handle the birth of a child then I will support it. Anyway, good write with expressing your thoughts and opinion on a very controversial subject in today's society. Good luck in the contest.


  • capricornpoet
    August 6, 2007

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    darkness

    Reality strikes a chord in this dark poem, the image
    wakes conscience, but does the soul follow...todays world has lost some... Its a pity this world, just a pity, It saddens me , this image did sadden me.
    A dark retourn if i may say.


  • PerVirtuous
    August 6, 2007

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    Your opinion is well reasoned and respected, your poetry is well written and also respected. The retourne is a difficult form, especially for a poem such as this, yet you pulled it off quite well. Kudos and applause for that.

    • JohnnyD gold member
      August 6, 2007
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      I'l subdue the dissenters if you'll eat em?


  • Desire gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Powerful piece penned Sweet One!!
    Painful to inhale and view images

    This one hits hard and tugs at heartstrings!

    Thank You for sharing this~
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Dear poetess,I respect your opinion and respectfully suggest that perhaps you may consider adding ADULT to the category this is in as it may be perturbing to our younger poets,that is not a criticism but an honest caring of both your right to care and to equally care about our younger poets,yes this is a controversial issue and one that is causing a poetess on ap to nearly lose her mind over as she has no choice for medical reasons to choose this option which no one should have to choose but the foetus is badly medically affected,in pain and has no chance of recovery,my heart goes out to her and to all the babies to be and all the moms,you do have a right to express your concerns and you have expressed them well.

    • Amera gold member
      August 6, 2007
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      Thank you. It's in "Abuse" category. Children can't see that either.

      • Yvette Champ gold member
        August 6, 2007
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        Thankyou very much for I did not realize that,it is reassuring


  • StarEyes
    August 6, 2007

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    *whistles low*

    Holy Smokes Girl!!! What a read this one is! And as far as your pen being out of control, I have to disagree with you, I think you are in perfect control of that pen, and saying what needs to be said! But then again that is my opinion too! Thanks for sharing this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and much love

    Nyetta


    • Amera gold member
      August 6, 2007
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      Thanks Nyetta, when I saw this contest there was no question in my mind. I had to write about what thoroughly disgusts me, controversial or not.

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