In the celestial universe
divine aura fills the skies
the super nova is not adverse
to the constellations prize
Cosmic dust refractive qualities
rain on us a luscious aurora
with the elliptic capabilities
leaving us with a terrestrial plethora
Such wonders fill the awesome spaces
that float above our tiny world
such beauty it embraces
into it’s wonder we are unfurled
Author notes
divine,elliptic,celestial,refractive, terrestrial,aurora,,skies,,constellations,,super nova, cosmic dust,Stars
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A contest entry
- Round one of four by Fire Opal, grannyeri, jess09stevenson, x Empathic Rose x, and IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very good, short but deep and well put together, great flow and use of word bank too.
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a shorter poem cool! and I loved the background that was the forst thing i noticed.
"Such wonders fill the awesome spaces
that float above our tiny world
such beauty it embraces
into it’s wonder we are unfurled"
This is what i call a real ending becasue it actually sounds final when you read it.
The rhyme was very good and precice. however I think it obstructed your creative vision here. I thought all the way through that you could have said that with more depth a different way.
but hey its a great poem. (clapps) very impressive -
Great use of the words given!
Beautifully written and displayed as always..
Lynda
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Quite the presentation on this page - very impressive. Liked the flow, rhythm and rhyme in your poem - good use of word bank list - poem does not read like a word bank poem - smooth and easy to read and understand.
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