The soft pink that fills the skies
A sunset
spreading silently, slowly
over the horizon.
Bring an end to the day
of a child's first cries.
A boy's first car.
A girl's first kiss.
Two lover's first embrace.
An old man's last breath,
as he smiles, picturing
in his mind
all of those waiting for him
that left him years ago.
A sunset,
bringing an end to a day
filled with
joy and laughter,
tears and sorrow,
heartache and happiness.
Blanketing all
in the knowledge,
tomorrow will be a new day.
Starting new beginnings,
new endings,
and all the precious
moments in between.
A contest entry
- If Not Human, What Would You Be? by Poetryintheblood.
350 points, ended August 13, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 10 of 10
-
To be Able to Convey
a sense of comparison between a sunset and the events of anyone during that same time was wonderful. i speacially loved the line regarding:
An old man's last breath,
as he smiles, picturing
in his mind
all of those waiting for him
that left him years ago.
Well Penned Piece, Many Thanks!
-
I really love this poem but I think I prefer "My Angel" so that is the one I will give the trophy too! x take care x
-
This is a lovely poem The imagery is so good and it is very reflective. This touched me. Excellent in every way
-
aye, all thoes precious moments in between. so 'oft we do forget, as we go on from sunrise to sunset, that there is so much more then simply makeing it through the next moment. but rather, owning that moment, liveing it... wather it would be fraught wi' challenges, or soft as a wee ones smile. i love wee reminders like theese ye ken, reminders that there is pain and hurt, but they are as beautiful as the love and joy. and thoes times mayhap, more then anything dictate who we become... mark our journey from sunrise to sunrise. and evera sunset a new chance... few and far in between are precious gems such as the one that ye 'ave penned here.
arden -
Wonderful imagery. I love sunsets and my write also had a picture of a sunset to go with the feel of things, sunsets paint a perfect picture [no pun intented] and a romantic scene would be lost without it. Lovely write.
-
Wow,
This one touched me in a very powerful way, almost bringing me to tears..all chocked up inside.. The way you have displayed this truth upon your poetic pages shows you have much wisdom within your youth. I appreciate you sharing here, and this is truly a piece that shall be remembered. I know it is embedded within my soul..Peace sweetie~
Daddy~
-
Aww this is a really sweet take on sunsets...new beginnings and endings indeed. I think my favourite part is the old man getting to see his friends again. Very nice, thank you for entering my contest and good luck x take care x
-
This is an imposing piece of beauty, peace and wisdom. Truly impressive.
-
Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
-
a sunset paints new beginnings and memories. the new endings also applies...
Adding your comment:
1 - 10 of 10
