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Illusion of Injustice

Metamorphisis -
transgression through time.
  Retrogrades beam of
    broken lies and blazen truths -
      caverns built upon weeping willows
          and blanketed by obscure dreams.

Reigning -
tainted crimson pours over pure ivory
    in morbid blood bath -
        cuts of incecision bleed
            and seep through the cracks.

Falsified
tendencies lead way -
      through barren and desolate lands -
        wastelands of misery and chaos
          play host to undead sirens.

Lithium
and cyanide rain -
    colors of sleep fused by Succubs
        in futile effort; mercury and arsenic -
              Gothic Ambrosia fit for the damned.

Benighted
and left forlorn -
    corpse carved for demented games.
      Bellowing and cascading -
        fallen forsaken into disgrace;
            becoming dark; illusion of injustice.

Author notes

Let me just tell you that I have no idea where this came from. I just started writing. It really makes no sense at first but if you read deeper into it, I guess you get the entire undertone of it. Enjoy.

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  • -XChiodosX-
    August 7, 2007

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    Am I just completely stupid or is there another reason that I don't understand any of this poem? I understand most of the words but when you put them together they don't even make sense the way you have it. I'm not really sure how to comment this because there is no understanding in it. If you want the reader to take something from this -- make sure that it is in terms of understanding. But if you are writing for yourself and you know that you can understand it -- then that's a different story. But like I said, I'm not 100% sure how to comment this piece as I have no clue as to what you are trying to tell me.