Standing in an empty room,
a window to my left; grey, bleak ocean
crashing against black cliffs.
Hear the rush of waves behind me -
turn around slowly, dull light
hits my face and stings my eyes.
Gaze down, note the sea beneath my feet.
Raise my head to the sky
as my body is consumed by waves
and my mind is brought back to consciousness.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired *10 entries only* by Naridill.
300 points, ended August 7, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is really pretty. I find it interesting because like none of the imagery is crazy amazing, and the words aren't like odd its all in the mood. Its like a foggy day doesn't have to say anything to you to be sleepy and creepy and everything like that. The images I do get from this poem though, are totally a misty beach..thats like half a room? I see it as the shore coming up into the room. And then like turning around and light envelops everything buts not quite like that sunlight or flourescent its like waking up with gray speckles in your eyes. And then its like you tumble back to away again. Super neat <3..
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This one was creative, has nice imagery within it.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck.
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