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Where is my Angel

My time is coming as I've feared
I wish that my baby, my angel was here

I take this noose and wrap it around
I step off my chair so that my feet cant touch the ground

My head is spinning and I try not to think
My eyes swell over in tears, death at its brink

I think of my family and how they have sucked,
I'm fading in and out of pain, thats my luck.

I think of my baby sister so sweet as she'd cry
I blink a few times, I cant feel my eyes.

My music sings of how I'm unloved {and it's true}
I can feel my face tense up, is it turning blue?

I see my lover as he sits at my funeral by my side,
My blood is pumping, body is swelling up wide.

I think I wake up to see my former angel come to me
I think I'm crying as he says this is how its ment to be

My former angel, was a love so pure
I did this on purpose to find my cure.

I drift off in thought one last time
I see the things, others had, I wished were mine

My breathing stops, my head hurts no more
I'm happy with my angel who makes me sore

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  • CarCrashHumor
    August 11, 2007

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    "I think of my baby sister so sweet as she'd cry"


    this had a bleak dismaying tone.

    you described your thoughts in addition to actions which is much better than the other way around.


    • NickelleteXninja
      August 11, 2007
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      Will you further explain that comment?

      With the sister line, when I was suicidal she was the reason I'd say no.. I always thought of her finding me and her reaction... it was a sad time

      but what do you mean by
      "you described your thoughts in addition to actions which is much better than the other "

      • CarCrashHumor
        August 11, 2007
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        I was just quoting my favorite line
        which was the sister line.
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        what I meant is that most people when describing a suicide scene only incorporate actions.. and maybe some feelings as well. but it was meant as a compliment that we could know what was going on, but that the emotions were the main focus.