tsunami rises
afar in ocean’s anger
blind mountain’s movement
Author notes
Would have been an entry in this contest, had I been on line at the right time. http://allpoetry.com/contest/2363164
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku's About Water 'n' stuff... Prewrites Welcome by PerVirtuous.
1300 points, ended August 18, 2007, 55 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comparing the mass of a tsunami to a solid land mass like a mountain, well done. I never really thought of it like that and kinda makes a tsunami that more ominous. Thanks for sharing UNT.
Vision Through Hiaku! -
stunnig
a breathless write, I am happy to have found your writing
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Not one of my best - my haiku gets better, but I don't mind having my experiments here on AP. I am glad you like it. It is a form I write only when it comes on me. I love the juxtaposing of discipline and freedom.
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as we grow
we need to remember the that what we write eary in our journey still carries impact on those who read the works later, I still like it very much and the picture is one of my most favorite ones -
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Ah yes, the Hokusai woodcut. This poem has been rendered as a "haikustrip" (by my agent, who used to be a semi-pro cartoonist), using a version of the painting, but with one little character in a rowing boat; but he tells me he can't find it
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powerful
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Very powerful words that carry this picture along the waves of your lines...very well done! ~Tia
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very nice. I'm can never make a haiku work, but you seem to have it mastered (no shock there). simply wonderful.
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I am moved by this... (pun intended) OK. It is very profound, as is all of your work. I will hold a Haiku contest that will allow prewrites just so you have a place to put this one.
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...and yes, I know it's not a shoe-in for a podium place.
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It was a work of the moment, Al, as haiku is. Thank you for your endorsement of this one. I look forward to your contest. I love it when a haiku comes together
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Yep, that's Mairi for us... pounding our shores
with poetic perfection!!!! glad to see you are
back!!!!! AP is never the same without you.
Laurie.
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I'm only kinda back, Laurie. Just "keeping my eye in" by doing contests. I really fancied this one, but it closed as I was actually composing the poem!
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Oh, this is a glorious haiku! You have captured the tsunami and the graphic of that classic Japanese print is wonderful! This is an awesome haiku. I am sorry you missed the contest!
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{chuckling} Thank you for the accolade. It is at least heartening to know that I am awake and composing glorious, awesome haiku when the other half of the world has gone to bed.
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Would have won too, the image is perfect! Did you know that giving a haiku a title in a contest other than the first five syllables in the poem takes unfair advantage. It can add an additional image. Just a point of protocall. I love this one.
Love,
Amera ♥
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That's why I (generally) don't give my haikus titles, over and above mentioning a theme, such as this contest theme. Hmmm... perhaps that's a title! Thanks for the compliments, Amera - much appreciated.
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Ah, this is so fine! A dramatic haiku that is an adventure into Neptune's lair!
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Thanks, Marilynn. I wrote it as a contest entry, but then found the door shut as I wrote it!
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