The waning sea,
The waxing tide
My lonely footprints they do hide.
And so erase they
My presence there,
For there's nary a spot, anywhere
That the ocean could,
Or would let me be,
An impression for all of the world to see.
Please tell me what you think
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Nice and concise. The verbiage was well done too, why no punctuation? It is equivalent to the road signs of reading, to tell the reader when to stop and then begin. Cool topic, I've done poetry like this before, and its a wonderful idea. The waxing idea is cool, but to wane is to decrease wax conversely is to increase, the sea growing larger and the tide smaller? Maybe I'm confused, probably I'm confused. But if not thats slightly awkward. Well done, I enjoyed the piece very much.
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Oh I love it short but it speaks volumes and leaves such a image in ones mind. It is a lovely picture a little bit of a sad tint but a lovely image. Well done beautiful!!!
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