I am a string of nonsense words,
Sewn up without a melody.
Cumbersome and awkward,
I stumble with a dearth of harmony.
My cadence is erratic as
The quavers of a first soliloquy.
My composition's benevolent intention,
Disappoints in all capacity.
Devoid am I of rhyme and rhythm,
Worn and distant as a faint memory.
But I am still a song just yet,
Sung again, lest you should forget me.
Author notes
Song of MysLef? The title is shared with Whitman's poem, that was the assignment
Please tell me what you think
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Nice work a little short, this is my opinion but I always find a poem easier to read if it is divided into stanzas(actually I have noticed that alot of people when they are new to ap do this)but as I said that is just my opinion. The words fit prettly but I can't help but wonder is that all they are supposed to do very complicated wording thrown in here is nice but like I say a poem should be more than pretty words. Anyhow over all a compelling piece! You will grow I am sure after all poetry writing is a never ending learning process.
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Very nice vocabulary here, I enjoyed the read. Thank you very much for sharing your words with all of us here and welcome to the site
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It is a powerful write, I'm very glad to read it again. "the dearth of harmony" was a spectacular description, very enjoyable. I believe the last line should be,
"lest you should forget me"; well done here, good job.
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This is unreal!! It's quite amazing... I love the line "I am a string of nonsense words, sewn up without melody" Very beautifully done. Thanks for posting. *Sonya*
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