I will chain and see you scream forever
death will only become your end
because your death will finally reverse old age and time
my beauty shall be forever mine.
This is my hand upon a knife
This will be my chance for eternal life
With withered lips that you may pray
But my rule will forever stay
I'm Elizabeth Bathory,
your blood shall make me ever perfect
your screams shall be bedecked,
within my walls
When my deeds are done
i shall be the only one
Beautiful enough to be remembered,
eternally forever and ever
I don't care how long it may take
how many souls that may bleed
their deaths shall be by my hand
by the time they realize coming here was a mistake
more than 600 was the count of bodies of woman and young girls alike
that are buried under my hallowed halls of vicious delights.
I know with out blood or my beauty
life would be a shallow hell
That even one as myself could not even rebel.
Time goes by with out a wink
Servants die with out a blink
I need more people to come to me
I need to revel in my fantasy
but then my luck spins and turns
and I realize I have yet to learn
as I await my trial,
and I'm in denial.
I sit here now in this tower
for one year...
as I steadly count down the hours
for two years...
how time seems to pass
for three years...
I realize this now for three years.
Though it seems like more that in life it is truly just a play,
and that my role horribly strayed
cursed to replay the events in my head.
I know now the blood countess is truly dead.
Author notes
Well this is about the blood countess elizabeth bathory.well most of the info I got was from the site thatwas on the contest page.As well as wikipedia, my memory,and this site which sells you models (which was sell one of bathory).My memory is a good source because two nights ago i was somthing about woman who kill.Yup Bathory was in it.Funny how this happen like this, huh? Anyway i could not relocate some of the sites so...ya.Thats about it except the more you reveiw and comment the more i write.
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I really liked this poem. Very enjoyable and very elegantly written. It read very well, one line just pushed you on to the next. You painted some very vivid imagery with your words. I liked the lines,
"When my deeds are done
I shall be the only one
Beautiful enough to be remembered,"
Well done.
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A female serial killer? Wow you dont hear about one of those very often do you? It talks about her beauty mixed in with the killing. Was her killing these women somehow tied in with her looks?
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If you know elizabeth.It was not only tied to her looks it was the preservationof it.Blood she thought was what made her beauiful,younger, and in the end more powerful(She was thought tobe the mostbeautiful woman in the world or area idon't really remember).She killed so that she remains young forever bathing in their blood and tortureing them for minor things.After the death of so many servent woman she looked around to the villages that surrounds her castle. She killed virgin woman thinking any thing less would do some thing else then the disired effect.
~Lovelikeblood
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Scary
Elizabeth has always been quite the mystery. I like the way you told this from her point of view, much better than just black and white facts and numbers (body count).
Great piece about a gruesome, inhumane, bug crazy old bat! -
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oh thanxs alot!I like how you discribed her lol maby you should make a poem about her.Lol
~OG
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Finally!!!
Someone choose Bathory, I've been waiting for this.
You did an amazing job, it was wonderfully written.
I loved how you wrote it from her point of view. I don't believe she could have explained herself as well as you wrote it.
This is a GREAT piece of work.
Good job, and good Luck in the contest.
Darkest Wishes
laUrel-danYelle
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Thank you!Be happy this poem was just ment for this contest.I normally don't like to make my poems ryme eather or make it long for that matter. But it was worth it and it was fun.Have a great day!
~OG
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