Oh lordy, I think it's broke!
Mother, I guess your insults have a bit of truth;
my stupidity as once again shown threw,
I'm certian, free from my regrets
that i've gone and killed you; I'm just like him.
I fall in love only to lose the bet
wooing girls i've never met;
Taking chances to know the outcome,
playing hero even though i'm not one.
I somehow knew I'd be "the ex-girlfriend"
the one in a million whos only one in ten.
I somehow knew I'd be "the ex-girlfriend"
the one in that Heaven took the liberty to aprehend.
When it comes to your boy bands, yeah girl your a star.
You'd be the perfect muse, and by my notes you are.
Yeah, you've got the taste for flair, and all those empty curves,
pardon the fact I stared; with atraction comes a curse.
When it comes to you artwork, yeah girl your a star.
You're a Divinci with a angry Lisa; Mona's moans vibrate, bizarre.
Yeah, you've got the splash for green, and all those useless memories
pardon the fact I'm trembeling, now I cant stand the band Emery.
Focus on your breathing as the water fills every inch;
you always thought drowning was easy, well guess again- it isn't.
I strugger to keep my hands in check, gripping tight around your neck.
Bruises I once drew, sleep like the angel I once knew.
I somehow knew I'd be "the ex-girlfriend"
the one in a million whos only one in ten.
I somehow knew I'd be "the ex-girlfriend"
the one in that Hell took the liberty to aprehend.
A contest entry
- My Almost Lover by teaa sarrr.
315 points, ended September 19, 2007, 24 entries
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Comments
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Wow this just rocks, good luck in the contest.
I really liked the title also it seems to be a good fit for this piece.
I loved this part:
When it comes to you artwork, yeah girl your a star.
You're a Divinci with a angry Lisa; Mona's moans vibrate, bizarre.
I adored this part. But this poem as a whole was great to.
Good luck but im sure you dont need it with the way you write.
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um you didnt read the rules i said no rhyymeeee! ugh. im sorry but im going to have to DQ you.
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I love the "empty curves" phrase the most. It's awesome...
"You're a Divinci with a angry Lisa; Mona's moans vibrate, bizarre.
Yeah, you've got the splash for green, and all those useless memories" is great too.
I also love the whole title and first two lines of "The Devil danced with Gabriel;
Oh lordy, I think it's broke!"
This is just great, girl!
Much love.
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