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Feluccas On The Nile

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Float above soft, shifting sands

as butterflies on the breeze,

the sails of old feluccas

stand proud as mighty trees.

 

A mirage captured in your eye

as on the Nile they sail,

past ancient towns on river banks

they weave their endless trail.

 

With cloth resplendent in the air

lateen rigged to the mast,

white Egyptian cotton

transports us to the past.

 

Wooden boats as old as time

short draft for a keel,

stones, food and passengers,

they ply their trade with zeal.

 

From early dawn to setting dusk

along the mighty Nile,

these desert sails weave magic,

assured to raise a smile.

 

 

 

 

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  • NooNiThEWitcH
    July 28, 2008

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    Indeed! This poem has made me smile and I have enjoyed reading it.
    I like your simple choice of words and rhyme.. magical piece!

    thank you so much for entering this in my contest.
    Keep on writing and good luck.

    Nooni


  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    August 20, 2007

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    very well done, you found a place of true desert sails and captured them beautifully.

    thanks and bast of luck


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 13, 2007

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    Brings back good memories of our wonderful holiday in luxor-a good few years ago now-
    Conjours up sweet thoughts of our time on the Nile and watching these graceful craft in motion-mesmerising...


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 13, 2007
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    Ahh Egypt-


  • Beautifully Poetic
    August 5, 2007

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    the picture which you have chosen above really does put the image straight into your head, and i think u have brilliantly captivated your readers, as you have to me through your words and phrasing. This is a very nice flowing and relaxed poem, and it takes me to my child hood days of sailing out into the ocean, wind in my hair!!! beautiful!!! marvellous!!!


  • arafura gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    desert sails...

    Wonderful use of imagery poet! Clever word choices and some very fine descriptive passages all add up to a wonderful read!
    First class! Good luck in the contest!

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