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Candy wrapper fantasies could only predict my
iminent [[depression]]
when we fell into another set of words
[if only we could catagorize love].

circle. circle. dot. dot.
and those
        childhood memories slip into my bloodstream.
[I need a disaster vaccine]

[I fell into your mouth like it was a prison term]
Life without parole. 
If only I was bulletproof;
That way I wouldn't shatter from the rain
[or from you].

"When will we dance on Love's coffin?"
you whisper.
[too bad that seems romantic
                          to me]

Author notes

Hmm.. I was listening to Evil by Interpol when I wrote this.

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  • whiterabbit.
    August 5, 2007

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    I really really love this (and I love Interpol too). This is really wonderful. Enjoyable and short, just what I wanted. I love the descriptions. Amazing job.


  • najji
    August 5, 2007

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    Circle.Cirlce.Dot.Dot..

    Aarghh!!

    That song is stuck in my head!!

    'circle. circle. dot. dot.
    Now you've got a cootie shot.
    {but I need a disaster vaccine]

    [I fell into your mouth like it was a prison term]
    Life without parole.
    If only I was bulletproof;
    That way I wouldn't shatter from the rain
    [or from you].'

    You are so much better than me!
    Like,
    arwdxcew!!!

    -cries in a lonely corner looking emo-
    you rock!

    [♥]
    Monica