I fixed myself some alphabet soup,
From a dull aluminum can.
I pulled off the top, with its jagged edge,
And poured it into the pan.
I stirred until it reached a boil,
With cerise bubbles aglow,
Pulled out my spoon, took a seat,
And gave the spoonful a blow.
I peered down upon the lustrous metal,
The carmine steaming broth,
And low and behold, a single word
Was etched inside the froth.
L-O-V-E,
The letters seemed so clear,
Like the waters of a flowing spring;
I held this soup so dear.
I saw within the hazy murk,
A stunning, warm reflection,
A picture of a certain boy,
Who retains all perfection.
Like a shocking revelation
As solid as a boulder,
I saw him there, a grinning stare,
As he peeked over my shoulder.
Author notes
Option a!
And it sucks...I'm sorry...
Cheesy love poems are not my forte. HUZZAH!
A contest entry
- 20 Titles - You do the math ;] by LaurenLightning--x.
1200 points, ended August 12, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Uh, oh! Spaghetti-O's!
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This sucks
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It totally does.
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Pointeeeeeeeeeeeeee
This definitly was a cheesy love poem...spaghetti and cheeeeese! Your poems are awesome, they make me laugh *wipes away tear*. Would you believe you sold me some spaghetti? You would be great in the advertising market. lol.
"I fixed myself some alphabet soup,
From a dull aluminum can.
I pulled off the top, with its jagged edge,
And poured it into the pan."
Rhyming is fun.
-Swintha
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Believe me cheesy love poems do not suck especially this one. I really enjoyed it. Especially the lines:
I saw him there, a grinning stare,
As he peeked over my shoulder.
This was a sweet poem and definitly deserved the silver. Congrats!
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Aww...thanks a bunch!
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OhMyGosh!
Lol, I think this is fantastic!
The imagery and rhyming is just.. wow.
And the way you used the title :] I love it!!
And low and behold, a single word
Was etched inside the froth.
L-O-V-E,
My favourite lines.
This is a very clever piece, and I don't think it's cheesy at all! I think it's beautiful and different.
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Thank you so very much! I really appreciate it!
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wow! cheesy love poems may suck...but this was very intertaining to read!
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Thank you so much!
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This is SOOOOO great!!! Wonderful write it definatley captures the imagination
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Thank you so much!
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As if I weren't giddy and goo-goo-eyed already... long story... ehem, this one reminds me of how little kids used to write eachother "love" letters, and I can see some little girl having an epiphany through these means just before she says yes to her admirer! Awwweee! How cute! I L-O-V-E love love this one!!!
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Thanks, Uchi dear!
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I love the description in this, excellent poem, and good luck in the competition!
((x))
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Thank you very much!
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IT DOES NOT SUCK. you sucketh my peen. I love you my dear lmao.
This poem is so adorable ^_^ I lubble it! luff luff luff luff yooooh♥
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I love you so much, Kerri.
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Awwww I like it! It is sooo cute! You are so creative, I'm jealous. Great job!
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Aww...thanks, Shay-na-na.
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