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black and white world

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black and white world  


surprised and distracted, don’t be surprised,
agree when you’re told and they will agree.
despised ‘cause you acted, you’ll be despised.
free in a black and white world; that’s not free.

just follow the rules; they’ll think you are just.
close your eyes to the hate, watch your mind close.
trust in the people you never can trust.
suppose that they’re right; be loved I suppose.

move to the beat of a different drum, just move.
be yourself, do it your way, in all you can be.
prove that you’re right there’s no way they can prove.
see how they hate it when their eyes can’t see.

we live in a black and white world; don’t we?
free your mind and let your heart keep you free.

 

 

 

Author notes

Shadow Sonnet:
Shadow Sonnet created by Amera M. Andersen may be written in any sonnet style. The Shadow takes place at the beginning and ending of each line as the words are identical or homophonic.
14 lines
9 or 10 syllables per line
Should have a volta or pivot
Iambic pentameter is not necessary

Form Sourse: Shadowpoetry.com

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  • Swan song gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    This has to be one of the coolest sonnets you have ever written. Amazing completely amazing I am not worthy and am kissing your feet lol

  • Justin3
    January 12, 2008

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    Brilliant

    A very very unique poem! I've never seen a poem written in this style before, I'll be sure to keep the Shadow Sonnet in mind for the future.The message here is also very truthful, and it is also timeless, it truly advocates the 'freedom of freedom'.Great work and thank you for entering.


  • BeautifulSecret
    August 23, 2007

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    Moving

    What a moving piece, I enjoyed this piece so much. It almost seemed as if it came off my tongue with a beat, almost an african dance style beat. Wonderful and moving piece!!Very well done.


  • penman gold member
    August 16, 2007

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    Beautiful

    It is so amazing how you can invoke such great feelings and images into a form. This was so masterful and full of truth. A true pleasure to read.


  • captain howdy
    August 7, 2007

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    "prove that you’re right there’s no way they can prove.

    see how they hate it when their eyes can’t see. "


    A lovely form you have invented and a great poem! You are a very talented young lady!

    .


  • PoetsAngel
    August 6, 2007

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    Once again a very well crafted masterpiece...is there no end to your talent

    Cathy
    ♥♥♥


  • Desire gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Wow!!!

    Love this one Form Queen
    and I have never done a Shadow Sonnet
    Oy~~
    This one just Magnificently executed
    Loved it!!

    Wooooooooooo hooooooooooooo
    So darn Creative

    Best wishes to You
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Brilliant

    Amera,
    I have not been on lately my dear. I am so happy I did and read this masterful [Work of Art!]
    The form is one that I am not familiar with. However, your poem flows so well with a powerful meaning in addition to following the format of Shadow Sonnet. WOW!
    Your artist mind always amazes me. Thanks for sharing this great piece. Reading great poetry may help me to write again.
    You are an inspiration
    Love,
    David


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    Again, well crafted. Amera, don't ever let a form dictate what you want to say - always make it your servant not your Mistress.


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    Ya know the more i read these "shadow sonnets" the more i enjoy.....well done and these made me think of life lessons...awesome, as usual DOLLFACE!!!!


  • scorpio rising
    August 5, 2007

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    Very Intelligent and insightful poem here miss


    Maybe the problam is....that everyone seems to think we live in a black and white world

    I of course...don't

    Like a river

    life...the world...runs wild and deep....twists and turns....causing confusing and complexity


    Ah...beautiful life!!!!

    The one thing that bothers me...is that I always have the feeling that the answers...the meaning for living

    Is right at our finger tips...right in front of our noses

    But all we see is black and white!


    Thanks for making me think beautiful girl!!!!


    Beautiful mind!!!


    Keep them comin!


    Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • PerVirtuous
    August 5, 2007

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    What a wonderful sonnet! The shadow sonnet flows as if all words belong. The image is very well delineated with powerful phrasing. All in all, I'd say it is a homerun. Best of luck to you in the contest. I love the volta!! Excellent.


  • HaleyMary
    August 5, 2007

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    Powerful write. Seemed to touch on the topic of racism and prejudice in society. I think it's sad when people are judgmental about others without getting to know them first. I liked the title of this piece. It seemed clever 'cause it seemed to have a double meaning, not only the difference of race, but to look at the world in black and white instead of shades of gray. There are both just and unjust people in this world and I can only hope that someday we will all be able to live in a just world where no-one has to worry about being ridiculed by anyone. Best of luck in the contest.


  • tawk gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    Wow what a thought provoking write. We always need to be the person who we are and not change ourselves to fit in. Society can be so cruel. Great write


    • Amera gold member
      August 5, 2007
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      tawk

      Thank you for the comment and the applause.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • RedAquarius
    August 5, 2007

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    Excellent, your unique touch and strong skill shine through. I especially liked the commentary on society nestled within here. Kudos, m'friend.

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