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My Secret Place

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There's a magical place that I often visit,
where all of my dreams and wishes come true.
A special place where I can be myself,
where happiness always seems to follow through.

In this place are creatures that roam,
so beautiful, magnificent, and free.
Just like us they have open hearts,
and a special language that they speak.

The forests here are so alive,
plentiful are the fruits that they bare.
Nothing but peace and harmony dwells within,
and tranquility floats in and around the air.

There is no sun or moon,
the temperature is always just right.
You can sleep all day and never have to worry,
about having to leave here at night.

Patience is a way of life here,
no one rushes to get to where they want to be.
People hold their heads up high and smile,
they're always proud to have you in their company.

You can find all of the solitude that you seek,
love and peace are so ominous here.
Every one respects and supports one another,
and their trust and loyalty will never disappear.

In tiny little caves live the most beautiful elves,
many with families of their very own.
Each one is unique with his or her own colors,
always seeking friends, never wanting to be alone.

The elves come out and frolic in the forests,
while unicorns roam and graze in the grassy fields.
With their powerful and majestic wings,
they bring a feeling of strength and security.

Fairies fly free throughout,
their fluttering wings sparkling bright.
Lighting up this magical universe,
like thousands of lanterns dancing in the night.

Stars decorate the clear night sky,
blazing afar, wanting to be seen.
They bring hope and encouragement to one and all,
creating a wonderful and tranquil scene.

The unicorns are so delicate yet strong,
their awesome presence will captivate you instantly.
Enchanting the hearts of all who come across them,
nothing can ever stand up to their uniqueness and beauty.

This is a place that I turn to,
whenever I am down and blue.
A wonderful and exciting trip,
that I would recommend for everyone, even you.

Friends, please take my hand and join me,
let us fly away into the sky.
Where miracles happen every day,
so that you don't have to wish or cry.

You will love this enchanted place,
my special and wonderful escape from time.
It helps me to forget about my problems and sorrows,
Even though it only exists in the back of my mind.




 

 

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  • This poem brings a smile to my face and joy to my heart. Amazing write.


  • Bullets
    June 4

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    This reminds me a bit of a poem I wrote. Exept yours has more details and prettier.
    Good luck
    -Bullets


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 20

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    This is a very good write but it was more then I asked for. 25 to 50 lines. Thank you for entering. It was a pleasure to read.


  • Symphony
    February 16

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    This was beautiful;

    You brought your special place to life, adn thank you for sharing it with us - no critique here, I really enjoyed reading it, it was so peaceful -

    Favourite part was, "You will love this enchanted place,
    my special and wonderful escape from time.
    It helps me to forget about my problems and sorrows,
    Even though it only exists in the back of my mind."

    I'd love to see a painting of this place; it would be wonderful!

    Thanks for entering


  • Riftkin gold member
    January 5

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    Wonderfully written and your words hold their own magic.

    Thank you very much for entering my contest.

    Riftkin


  • Topaze
    December 31, 2008
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    Very well done my friend, sounds like a lovely place. My best wishes.


  • penman gold member
    December 30, 2008
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    Excellent

    A terrific write. So very creative. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Nicada silver member
    December 18, 2008

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    What a beautiful and positive, uplifting write you have penned here. Very good rhyme, rhythm and flow in this poem. Nice job, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • The Green Elf
    October 23, 2008

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    o my goodness.

    I LOVE THIS POEM. It's so beautiful. Actually when I was looking on google for a picture prompt for this contest i almost used this picture until I saw it was already in my contest! I love this poem i love this poem i love this POEM!!!!!! (Sorry)


  • Yellow-Rose
    April 15, 2008

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    'like thousands of lanterns dancing in the night.'
    This is a truly beautiful place to escape to. You have a wonderful imagination. Thank you for your entry.


  • Blossom Fairy
    January 15, 2008

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    Oh, what a supremely fine adventure into the blissful land of the fey folk. Thank you for this fine entry that is so delightful to read.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 6, 2007
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    A sweet, breathtaking piece, full of peace, and tranquility, magic, mysticism..I too had a place in the back of my mind like this once..before I neglected the elves, and they revolted, and prceeded to burn it all down!!...lol..!
    So, I can be ready to go in about an hour..?..lol
    Best of luck to you, in my contest,
    Jin

  • Virgoan
    August 28, 2007

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    Great narration of a poem. I wish blissfulness does exist forever. Great job fellow poet.

    Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    >>>VIRGOAN


  • Dlvvanzor
    August 21, 2007

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    I love it. It has a lilting feeling that just makes you mellow. Beautiful images and it's a lovely world.

    Good luck in the contest,
    -Dlvvanzor


  • Dragons Lady
    August 21, 2007
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    Beautifully detailed imagery paints a portrait of a very peaceful forest. The flow is so smooth and calming. I love this write. I wish that place existed somewhere outside the mind. Alas, if we can't go there then we can always dream about it. Well done. Thank you for sending it to me.


  • aslanlight
    August 19, 2007

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    What a beautiful secret place! You truly poured out your heart in this and it gladdens mine that people like you share my universe!

    Peace Georgia


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    An enchanting write, wonderful rhythm and rhyme giving us a nice flow guiding us through each line. Good luck in the contest ~Tia


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    Great imagery and flow. Exceptional place it seems. a enjoyable piece. Best of luck to you in the contest hun.
    Vicky


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 5, 2007

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    This was like a fantasy movie. I could feel everything you described. It was a wonderful trip Jeremy. What a beautiful piece of work that just takes you on a trip to Never Never land... Great job
    Soulful Woman


  • Melodies
    August 5, 2007

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    I can't help it. I am cracking up!!

    Please forgive me, but when I saw the title of this contest and the description, I immediately thought... "The toilet." Then when I read the first four lines of of your poem I cracked up, thinking... YES!! Exactly!! The toilet!! Oh, do forgive me but I could not help sharing this with a likewise good natured poet.

    NOW, that being said so naughty of me... Your poem is just wonderful and I love the images and enchantment of it so much. I share this mental magical place with you and hope to meet you there! Wouldn't that be fun?

    Melodies

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