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Wolf

He raised his burly head
slightly, and as a canine;
whistled

one

two…


It caught her attention
like an infection.

Her gaze continued
as the puss filled spots
began to form
and spread.

He smiled that white,
dazzling smile
and winked,


mirroring her
‘come hither’ expression.

He moistened his
black, scabby lips
and approached
her.

Smacking her with his
pungent breath
she felt a Summer's breeze
upon her skin.

Then beaten,
by the swarm of moths

inside, he caught her

diseased embrace


and her symptoms
were terminal.

Author notes

Thought it was about time for a sick love poem.

Just for the record, I'm happy in my "healthy" relationship

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  • opaqueangel
    September 6, 2007
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    Wow this is both beautiful and emensly sad. It really makes your heart ache and I am sure thats what you were going for, so excelent job! You made me want to cry and fall on my knees thanking the gods that me and my lover are both healthy! You had an excelent flow and everything really fit perfectly drawing the reader into the feeling of the poem. All and all a great write, keep up the good work!


  • opaqueangel
    September 6, 2007

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    Wow this is both beaytiful and emensly sad. It really makes your heart ache and I am sure thats what you were going for, so excelent job! You made me want to cry and fall on my knees thanking the gods that me and my lover are both healthy! You had an excelent flow and everything really fit perfectly drawing the reader into the feeling of the poem. All and all a great write, keep up the good work!


  • lindaburns gold member
    August 29, 2007

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    talk about a toxic relationship.......

    No one can truthfully say your work has no imagery. You paint a vivid, ugly picture of an ugly, common situation. “Come kill me while I’m killing you”. Good work.