eel grey watering can
slug green strawberry leaves
Summer's gone.
A contest entry
- Minimalist by Naridill.
870 points, ended August 5, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Quest ~ Prewrite Party 2 by Namita.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 95 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pimp up my quickies or snippets by leander.
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The format of this snippet has a lot of a haiku actually
and I like the imagery you've added into this.
Thanks for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Wonderful imagery penned into paper. Thank you for entering this write.
Luv,
~Candy
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the image you show the reader in this is great, love it
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Soooo sad that summers almost ended...wonderful images of spent strawberry leaves and a lonely eel grey watering can.
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Great images and I like the color comparisons.
I really don't want summer to be gone though.
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A perfectly depicted miniature word-picture. And I think "gone" is the right word-choice, because it chimes in nicely with "can."
Bill
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I like this. My only querie is if you could change last word, but that is more personal prefference [perhaps something like - faded, absent] etc.
But yeah, other than that, this piece expresses alot in minimal but not simple terms.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck
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