to the east I fled
towards the sun,
darning a needle
by my side,
riddle in a haystack
lost my temper in the valley,
couldn't find a home
to follow through to,
a stream ran to my heart
and I drank with all
thirst and yearning
for what seemed an eternity
legacy counted my days
till I wrecked upon
prairie grasses
at the side of
an asphalt ocean,
yuppies burning
incandescent in my ears
red far as the eye could see,
glass pondered for a moment
and touched the sky
with a flawless toothbrush
to wipe the smug grin from
my sleep-atrophied face
kin, strong as bloodlines,
desperate to bleed me
to my final last drop,
thieves, crusty hands
that sent me to
departed seas
the world seemed
grey and dismal,
caught a barnacle in my hand
from a passing eighteen-wheeler,
slipped me a twenty
and told me to go
fuck myself,
but I liked the feel of
the metal can crushing against
his head and the powerful
rush in my lungs as
I ran for my desert palace
now cacti are caught in my throat,
men wish to rip
virgin flesh from
something as small as a doll,
wishing to touch me
with dirty fingers and
like a silenced lamb,
I weep for mornings
braying to themselves
a storm coming through
west I flee,
milking a white moon
into my skyless eyes,
blue surrender my
only companion tonight
Author notes
I tried to make the narrator have a story that she can pass on like a legacy
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Applying for hmmm...second cousin twice removed
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tear drop
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A contest entry
- LOOKING FOR AP FAMILY MEMBERS BECAUSE I AM AN ORPHAN. by Swan song.
450 points, ended August 6, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable winner
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600 points, ended July 22, 30 entries
Silver trophy winner
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This is actually a really cool poem. I like how your doing this like a story. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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I loved the symbolism I picked up while reading. The third line of your second stanza was bit awkward for me. I think that was simply because it ends and begins with the word to. You might consider leaving it off the end of the line.
Still I enjoyed it immensely. -
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Thanks so much for your entry in the Allpoetry Extravaganza contest. The was a very unique and different write. Best of luck in the contest.
Paul -
Different for sure -- was going along with a Shakespeare type of a thought but when I got to the 18 wheeler I knew I was off course.
Thanks for you entry into the Legacy contest and good luck
lisa -
This is really good, but like I said, I get bored really easy... Koodles
Blessed be
Mystic -
I like the way this opens, heading east toward the rising sun. There are some very creative uses of color as well (e.g. "blue surrender", "red far as...", "asphalt ocean"). In all, it seems like a long wandering dream, at times anchored, at times floating free.
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This is one hell of a poem. Narrative in nature you convey everything very vividly. All the gears were working in your mind here no doubt. Very Good.
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Thanks for your entry in the contest.
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wow.. that's all I have to say
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